SageOctober

First off, you have a really good set up here. It's not too obvious what's going to happen, but I'm pretty sure that nothing good is going to happen during ...

Hi! Sage here to write a quick review! Firstly, nice first paragraph. You do a nice job of showing not telling with the description of how her body changes when ...

Hello! Sage here to write a quick review! I love all of your descriptions, as well as the tone. It helps us understand her character more. Also, I like how ...

Hello! Sage here to write a quick review. Right off, your chapter is very active and engaging, encouraging the reader to continue reading. And from there, you keep the action ...

First off, I love the picture at the top! Anyways, awesome job with your descriptions and dialogue. The whole premise is very intriguing. I like the different characters, they're all ...

First off, I love this start! Very intriguing. It's also quite realistic, very believable, like this is a real person really grieving over their sister. It seems that our protagonist ...

I really like this prologue! It seems you could go in a lot of different directions with this story, so it really makes readers want to read more. Overall your ...

I read the first chapter of this, and was very intrigued. I like this one as well. The main thing that I think is off is that maybe Chad should ...

I really like the premise, and now I'm really curious about this world. The descriptions of the characters are really nice, they help the reader visualize what's going on. I ...

I really enjoyed this chapter, and I really want to read more! The first paragraph is pretty fun and random, which I think is perfect for someone that is drunk ...

First off, I love the map at the top! How did you make that? It gives the reader some good information about the world. Just a quick grammatical error: "Taking ...

Hello! I'm new here so this is my first review :) I really like your story, as well as the premise. It's really intriguing. There are a few grammatical errors, ...