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Rydia

  • Poetry » Other, Other Re: Snowflake

    Snow is one of my favourite things in the world so the title caught my attention immediately but maybe add an extra adjective or something to make the title more ...

    Apr 25, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: June Haiku

    So I have to write a review (and how have you posted so little!) but then I saw this haiku - or two - and thought I'd give it a ...

    Apr 24, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Burning Eyes

    Hello! So I'm meant to be writing a poem at the moment but I'm not feeling too inspired so I figured I'd put that energy into reviewing one instead. Specifics ...

    Apr 23, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » General, Historical Fiction Re: Untitled, Chapter One

    Hello! I'm going to avoid reading my previous review for now and see what strikes me about the chapter from a fresh viewpoint. Specifics 1. I think the first sentence ...

    Apr 22, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fanfiction Re: Brink Of The World- The Walking Dead - Fanfiction- Chapter #1

    Hi, welcome to the site! Fan-fiction isn't normally my first choice but I love The Walking Dead so I thought I'd take a look :) Specifics 1. The first paragraph ...

    Apr 22, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, Fantasy Re: The girl

    Hi buddy, buddy... Specifics 1. I'm not sure if you need the third line. That one's very telling and I think the solid descriptions you have in lines four and ...

    Apr 20, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Tryal's Curse 22.2

    Specifics 1. I'm not sure I like how casual they are about the death of the meka. From what we've learned so far, this is a really important position and ...

    Apr 19, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Among the shadows the leaves sleep

    Hello! I'm in a poetry kind of mood so thought I'd take a look :) Specifics 1. I think your second line is too long and it's hurting the flow! ...

    Apr 18, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Fanfiction Re: .

    I'm not a huge fan of fan-fiction so I probably won't read more than one of these but I saw you were looking for reviews and I thought I'd oblige! ...

    Apr 17, 2016
  • Poetry » General, Lyrical Re: A Response to William Blake's "The Tyger"

    I'm a fan of the original so thought I'd take a look at this! Specifics 1. I like that God and flawed don't quite rhyme in stanza one, just like ...

    Apr 16, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Tryal's Curse 22.1

    I'm going to be away this weekend so I'm drafting a few reviews to hopefully post and not lose my team tortoise position. That means you'll probably not get this ...

    Apr 15, 2016
  • Poetry » Humor, General Re: Upside - down

    Hi there, nice to meet you. This poem is very fun and I could definitely see it in a book of children's poems or even on the wall at a ...

    Apr 13, 2016
  • Lyrics » Lyrical, General Re: Intuition

    Hullo! Thought I'd take a look at this... Specifics 1. I'm not sure how I feel about the opening line being a well known phrase. It's familiar and that may ...

    Apr 12, 2016
  • Lyrics » Lyrical, Other Re: Only One

    Hello! It's been a while since I reviewed a song so I figured I'd check this out. Specifics 1. Before I start reading, my first observation is that you haven't ...

    Apr 11, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Tryal's Curse 21.2

    I'm waiting for food to cook so you get (most of) my attention :p Specifics 1. Who would fight? he thought, as they ran past the town hall. The street ...

    Apr 14, 2016


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