Rydia

I like the internal rhyme of this piece, it seems to keep the rhythm going and gives it a rather sinister atmosphere. Very fitting. Also, your imagery is imaginative and ...

You should probably finish work before you post it here. People prefer to read a polished poem and tear that to shreds rather than unravelling half finished drafts. Okay rant ...

This piece needs some work. I think you should try and be more original, stick to the original idea but start again with the rest. Sorry if it sounds harsh ...

It's not the best piece and I'm not fond on the two line format but I like the idea and the symbolism of the violet lies close to my own ...

Some of the imagery in this piece is interesting but it needs to be stronger and you have so many lines that don't really add to the meaning of your ...

This is nice and imaginative but your tenses are a bit rough and I found a few other mistakes... Here are the corrections I think you need to make... I ...

I agree that you have to fix the rhymes and a more regular rhythm wouldn't hurt. Rhyme always seems a little out of place without rhythm. Also, some more imagery ...

This is okay but I don't think you describe what an enigma is completely. An enigma isn't just a list of opposites, it's so much more than that. One definition ...

I liked this poem but your line breaks seem to be quite random and the language was quite simple. My suggestion to you is to expand your vocabulary a little. ...

I'm not so sure about where the line breaks are either but then again this seems to be poetic prose rather than poetry and I'm still finding it difficult to ...

Yeah the incorrect spelling of until put me off from the beginning and with out should be one word - without. Other than that it's too repetetive and lacking in ...

I like the idea of this poem but it's rather simplistic and repetetive. Also I wanted to comment on two of the lines in particular... we we get new, I ...

This part was very nice and I'm glad you took the time to describe Forrest though he's certainly not what I expected. Just a few poits to make on this ...

Okay, first off if you're going with the whole repetition thing you have to be consistent. I think it's just the one line but it still annoyed me - bubble ...

I think that archaic language can be powerful when used correctly but it doesn't fit the rather modern structure of this poem. Rhyming couplets yes but a different rhyme each ...