Rydia

It's an interesting subject to write about. Others have tried abortion, cloning, rape but I've seen few who have seriously tried to write about cutting. You start off well with ...

Hey there! I love the ending of this chapter, dear. A little predictable I'm afraid but good nonetheless. I take it that Autumn is the one who didn't get a ...

I'm in quite a poetic mood so why not - your name: 'That which we call a rose By any other name would smell as sweet' so whether I be ...

First, a quick note - Welcome to the site! Try not to be too impatient, okay? Sometimes it can take a few days to get critiques but bumping your own ...

Yay for more Mercenary Wings! An excellent chapter my dear. I'm loving the character of Lane but starting to wonder if I'm so fond of the king. He seems rash ...

Hello there, Eliza! I have quite a few comments to make about this piece so let's start with something very general - imagery. You have a good use of description ...

Hmmm. This is reasonably written but it's much too short to be critiqued properly. Please try to write the whole chapter before posting on YWS so that there is enough ...

This poem is lovely my dear! Or rather it's morbid and creepy but I like it ^^ I wish I knew what the title meant but I can take an ...

You've got a really cute little story here dear but I think you could do more with the metaphor. Try not to repeat load and line and such so often ...

This is beautifully written, Via. I love how your poetry is so elaborate and open to so many different interpretations. Your use of metaphors is so lovely! First I have ...

This poem wasn't too great. You've chosen a very difficult theme that only the best of writers can make original and then produced a list of related sentences. Some of ...

I love her books. Admittedly, they often have tragic aspects but one or two end happily or relatively so. If you want one of her better books, go for the ...

At the moment this is a bit of a list. It's a nice idea, to show how one girl shadows her friends but I think you need to expand it. ...

Hello there, I don't believe we've met yet. Welcome to the site! I just thought I should let you know that one of the rules at YWS is that you ...

Hello again! You have some very effective repetition here and a nice use of short sentences but a touch more description would be nice. A little more character description of ...