Rook

Oh this would sound so amazing with some rhythm and rhyme! Ah! Just imagining it is like music! I really liked the subject of the sculptor making his love out ...

This was quite an interesting haiku. I agree with a lot of what Aley said. But I was okay with the "and" at the beginning of your sentence. You gotta ...

Hello there Aley. This sounded like it was written in a code. It added mystery to it, but I couldn't really understand what you were getting at. It sounded really ...

I'm sorry but your lack of capitalizing your "I's" and not putting "you're" instead of "your" when you're trying to say "you are" kind of threw me off, but I'm ...

Woah. This was so deep. and geez! you've got some talent! The symbolism was so deep and descriptive and I just.... wow! I can't get over this! This is like, ...

This is a powerful poem. At the beginning it reminds me of when in those movies there's a woman walking with an explosion behind her, and then when you say ...

I'm just gonna type what I think as I read this, okay? Oooh is it really green? Is that possible? And is that the ONLY injury she's suffering? Is Naomi ...

I think this is beautiful, and the title is really great. One thing you might not think about, the person was digging in a park under a rose bush. Would ...

OH NO! I knew it the minute the parents left that something bad was going to happen! Again, you write very well. Very fluently. You painted a perfect image of ...

This was cute, but kind of cliche. sorry. I'd try and lose some of the "poeticness" and just say what you feel if your rhyme scheme is holding you back, ...

I'm sorry, but I'm going to quote most of your poem. "The winds of change arouse in light," -I don't think arouse is the right word to use there. maybe ...

This is so beautiful. I love how you packed such raw emotion into simple sentences. I especially like where you spell out A-y-d-e-n and reiterate that THAT is your name. ...

This sounds less like a poem and more like something you say to yourself when you're alone. It started out okay with all the symbolism but I felt like the ...

I like it! a couple things need work, though. At first I thought you were going to have a rhyme scheme because of night and lights, but then I was ...

I don't know whether you're talking to your pencil or a person. I'd make that clear. Also, the rhyming is a bit forced and not very good. Sorry. I don't ...