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Let's take this line by line, shall we? "Night, Bright starry night, full of amazement and delight..." The rhyme here seems rather unoriginal, Edgar Allan Poe used a lot of ...

This is a really passionate poem. Great job! You pulled me in right away with the first stanza and after that, it kept my interest. I felt like your rhythm ...

Good job writing another chapter! Keep it up! I'm so happy that they've finally found a place to live even if it is in the slums. I like how how ...

Aw. This is so cute and tragic at the same time.

I really liked this. Your emotions were real, and The reactions to what happened were also real: an admirable quaility in a book such as this. I felt like I ...

First off: THIS WAS SOOOOOOOO LONG! wah! I can't remember most of what I've read. Maybe you should make your chapters just a wee bit shorter so people can have ...

Holy cow that was PERFECT rhyme and rhythm. I just... it's so beautiful! I think I put on your other poem called Tears that the rhymes were kind of awkward, ...

That was awesome! I just loved that whole analogy so much! My favorite lines were: "We are gold-fish souls sold at carnival fairs and entrusted in the clumsy hands of ...

I'd really like stanzas in this... I couldn't really read it as a poem without them. This piece I really didn't like at all. I couldn't see the point in ...

This was quite lovely. You had pretty good rhythm even if it was a bit stiff in places, and you visuals were also pretty good. One thing I didn't like ...

Your visuals were very beautiful and vivid! You definitely captured the essence of paradise! Your second (and last) stanza was my favorite, especially the part with the moon and the ...

Oh, this was so pretty! First off, your title was perfect, something so simple really adds to the beauty of this piece. you made sadness seem so beautiful. I think ...

I read a lot of poems on this sit really really fast, but yours for some reason forced me to slow down and really focus on what you're saying. I'm ...

First of all: CREEEEEEEEEEEEEPYYYYYYYYYYYY Very very very creepy. I congratulate you a scaring the wits out of me while using not violence or axe murders. I loved all your descriptions ...

Okay, so your rhyme scheme changes in this poem. You need to tackle that and get it down. The first stanza doen't have any rhyme, while the second is ABCB, ...