No Man Alone

This is perhaps a perfect poem in meaning. I couldn't have put it any better, myself. On to the review:

First of all, after reading it, I have only good things to say about this poem. It's one of those poems that you look at, and because it is so personal and fitting, I was just in awe. At first it was as if I had a tear in my eye because of how truthful it was, but then I giggled to myself, because of how truthful it was.

Two lines that particular stand out to me as spectacular (which is quite saying something in regards to this poem, because it seems all of the lines are spectacular) are "The past is gone, but still remains, / And memories do not make chains." Perfect. Absolutely perfect. Saying that the past is gone but still remains seems like a contradiction, until the next line, which explains that the remaining part of the past is the memories, which of course, don't restrict your future. That's what I get from it, at least. Quite a clever metaphor that fit with the rhyme scheme, as well.

I really don't want to get too personal with this review, but oh my, this poem makes it necessary in order to praise. "No man alone is without a friend." My interpretation of this, is that after losing a loved one, you feel alone, lost, empty, and the like, but there still is that friend there for you to be able to get through it and persevere, thus, there is no need to embrace the loneliness. As you said, quite brilliantly at that: "Remember rage is heart's own lie, / That pain is brief and sorrows fly;"

I would really like to apologize on the fact that I don't see anything negative in this poem to provide constructive criticism. I just really, really needed to read this poem.

Keep writing.

Wow, Mossyra.

This is probably one of the most beautiful poems I have read in this website. Your style, rhythm, and wording makes is so easy to read and the message is so enjoyable and beautiful. My jaw dropped. I just... had to read it again. The start was captivating, the in between was entertaining, and the end was just lovely enough. That's how a poem should be written. So congratulations on that. I'm a fan. *bows*

But you know what would make this more lovely? Stanzas. This poem can be perfectly divided into stanzas<3 And I'm already in love with it. But the stanzas would actually give the reader a break to stop and think about the message you're bringing us. It would allow us to contemplate your words and to analyze your thoughts, like your poetry deserves it. So think about it, eh?

Hopefully, my words make sense. However, feel free to contact me if you have any questions! Keep writing AND posting.

~GeeLyria

Holy cow that was PERFECT rhyme and rhythm. I just... it's so beautiful! I think I put on your other poem called Tears that the rhymes were kind of awkward, but this one is so good. I love it. I love everything about this poem! The subject, your word choice, the title, the punctuation even! Great job! It was amazing I had no complaints. This was my favorite part:

Nor any else we choose to say,
But search for stars and hope of day.
Remember these, should all else fail,
Should hope and faith no truth avail;
Remember these until the end,
No man alone is without friend.

I really like the message you have here, like "no man is an island." I think more people need to hear something so beautiful as this and with such a strong message.
A lot of people need to know that they aren't alone. and your poem is such a great medium of telling them that.
You may be one of those great poets someday if you keep writing like this.
I really have no critiques, except to maybe divide this up into stanzas so I can get messages out of each one separately instead of just out of the entire poem.
Really, fabulous job! Keep writing!

-Fortis Fortitude

This is an amazing poem; keep writing them. It had good flow and it had a great meaning behind the words. It is most definitely a thought provoking poem. I really enjoyed it, and I saw no grammatical error, which made it all the better. In short, keep writing poems, you're good at it.

This is lovely, and awesome. I love the way the words flowed and matched but most of all I loved the message. It is a rare treat when beautiful verse and beautiful meaning forum so wonderfully together.

My favorite verse was this one:

Remember, doubt is not a sin,
But simply lack of faith within;

Really wonderful, and it spoke to me in a way I don't often find in poems, in fact the whole thing did so truly, Bravo!

I didn't find anything grammatically wrong but did feel that this line broke the flow a bit,

"The world endures, the heart lifts free,
And faith holds all that answers be"

-The end of the second line is a little teensy tiny bit awkward, something about "that answers be" just doesn't sit right. If you could find a way to fix the awkwardness and still preserve the meaning this poem would be impeccable.


But like I said before it is all truly wonderful, so if you can't don't let it drive you nuts, this is still a real treat of a poem.

Keep writing! I look forward to your next poem.

This is a beautiful and thoughtful poem; this is the first piece I've read of yours and you're clearly a talented poet. Your language is easy to follow but creative and soulful and the words flow off the page into my head like liquid. I found very little to criticise really, except for one or two instances where your otherwise impeccable flow falls a little short:

"Remember love is not a test;
No more is life a journey, rest,"

The second line here seems to be at odds with how the rest of the poem flows. A full stop and new stanza may work here, but then I liked that the whole poem was a fluid single verse, so maybe the wording in this line just needs a little work. The other bit I'll bring up is this:

"Remember these, should all else fail,
Should hope and faith no truth avail;"

I wasn't sure whether to mark this as a break in flow or just a small problem of language, as "faith no truth" in the second line did make me stop to go back and re-read this section. Technically, it does fit with the flow, and technically it does make sense, but it felt a little off when compared to the easy readability of the rest of the poem.

Overall, I loved this poem and think it's almost perfect, there's just those two little bits you may want to look at. But great work, I'd love to see more from you in the poetry section. Well done and keep writing