Riedawriter23

Okay let me start off by saying, great choice of words and meaning and nice story line. But I have a question. Who are you talking to exactly throughout the ...

I get about half of what you were trying to say. I think that there were mixed feelings while you were writing this? It sort of seems like you were ...

This was really nice. Besides the fact that the i's were lowercase and the whole thing sort of read like a paragraph. Maybe...some lines will work? I know this flows ...

Wow this was great Andy! I love your descriptions and the perspective you put this in was superb. Is this like a diary entry? I noticed a name at the ...

God! Ariel is such a badass! I really didn't expect her to be like this, but it was for the better. It makes Ch. even more interesting which I thought ...

Oh great now Jon is in trouble? Great! More suspence and I'm guessing the answering of questions is...far off? Again I say that I hope it is. Ch. is way ...

I rather liked this. I caught the mood and the meaning even though I caught the mood more so. *He is the rent of reason, a soggy sacrament, his shadow ...

Yes I like the edit better. Everything is now perfecto! I really liked how it had such a story like meaning, yet a poets voice. That's often hard to do ...

This was really nice. It flowed beautifully and the lines were well plotted out. I also like the meanings of your poems. And I too reread your poems over and ...

Amazing. Ch. never stops surprising me. Everything was in touch with the others. Giving suspence and leaving things hanging keeping (ME) everyone interested and reading intently. And Sarah's not in ...

Was...not....expecting...that! Whoa I mean I thought Ariel was a good girl but um...she's kinky. A threesome? That was hott! I mean Kyle, Jon, AND Ariel, just amazing Brad you certainly ...

AHHH! I don't even know what to think right now! You've truley shocked me Brad! I mean Ariel? That's one turn you just put on this. This'll create even more.... ...

Ooo this WAS da bomb Brad! Aside form the errors (which everyone else corrected) this was a perfect sequel. I too recognized the Rodriguez thing. I can't wait to see ...

Yes, really better without the charcoal spheres part. I really liked this poem. It needs a little more description though. If you could add in a few more adjectives to ...

This was great! Now we're back to the serious medical stuff and back to Jon. Wonderful! I loved all the medical problems that were going on that was nice, now ...