Renard

Hello. I noticed that this work was rather short. At first glance that could have been a criticism, however, you have been clear and concise in what you've said, so ...

Hello. I have to disagree with the main point in your poem: Everyone has a fear That holds them back. But everyone is also Brave and courageous Deep down inside. ...

Hello. And YAY. Thank you for not being afraid of writing something I imagine will become very controversial. Also, I am a fan of deliberately disturbed formatting. It makes such ...

Hello. Nice title. Alright, so there are some really great things in this work. You have good characterisation and a nice handle on the dialogue between the members of your ...

Hello! Congratulations on a year of YWS btw. Now.... What Went Well: 1. The organisational structure of the piece eg. even stanzas 2. Punctuation and grammatical choices eg. rhetorical questions, ...

Hello. You have a very interesting style for writing this - like it's a script done on a typewriter or something. Either way it's ok. A stylistic feature. So, for ...

Hello. You keep doing this. I am finding it harder and harder to nitpick with your writing. So instead, I am just going to say what I liked AND learnt ...

Hello. Now this one I reallllly like. You seem to have personified the traits: 'Selfish' etc. by capitalizing them. Very smart. This reminds me of the sort of way I ...

Hello I know this was supposed to be haunted, but I got more the impression that you were sending up the concept of "prom" Especially from: Big poofy hair, Big ...

Hello When I started reading this I noticed the structure became quickly chaotic. And at first glance it looks somewhat childish, but on closer inspection it's actually quite clever. The ...

Hello. This work is very hyperbolic: I wrote a thousand poems for you last night, but I forgot them all during the tossing of the waves. Not a bad thing ...

Hello I feel like this is less of a poem and more of a novel chapter. It's interesting the way you have such a narrative going in a poem. Very ...

Hello. I was intrigued to see what this was about after you said this poem "wrote itself." And after reading it, i found that I didn't understand why most of ...

Hello. I agree with the message in this poem 100%. So that's gooood. However, the way you have presented it is very touchy feely. Whilst it is an original presentation ...

Hey I would have rated this work 18+ personally, because of what you are writing about and the way you are saying it. Firstly, I don't know what happened to ...