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Re: Popularity Contest
Hi!! Welcome to your first month at YWS!! I really like the direction and quality of your poem. It's an old topic that gets passed around each generation: the cool ...
Nov 1, 2015 -
Re: [Untitled]- Chapter 1
Hi!! I really enjoyed reading this! I like the novelty of how this starts. The ambiguity of Jace and Connor's possible friendship or budding romance is quite nice. Oh! I ...
Nov 1, 2015 -
Re: Hope
Hi! Thanks for requesting a review, but the next time copy and paste the link to your work in your request, so I can find it easier! :) I really ...
Dec 5, 2014 -
Re: there is blood on your hands
Hi! Thanks for requesting a review I don't have much to say because this is so short, but here are the few things I think you can work on: First ...
Dec 5, 2014 -
Re: how do we live like this?
Hi! Thanks so much for requesting a review! This is a short piece, but here are the few nitpicks I found: The lack of punctuation and capitalization takes away from ...
Dec 5, 2014 -
Re: I Am.
Hi! (waves excitedly!) Now that the holidays here are over, I can concentrate on doing a great review! I have tried reading this piece before, and was a tad confused ...
Nov 29, 2014 -
Re: If only
Hi! I really enjoyed this piece! :) There were just a few grammatical errors I want to point out: "Today's the day the day you see me for me (I ...
Nov 24, 2014 -
Re: I:The Room
Hi! This is a very interesting piece, and I would be so excited if you continued writing this! I want to know what happened to the girl in the past ...
Nov 24, 2014 -
Re: Torn
Hi! I really enjoyed your poem! I am not quite sure why the title in torn though... T'was there in a room T'was her who was shouting (I am not ...
Nov 23, 2014 -
Re: Love Forever
Hi! This is a very whimsical poem, about a beautiful love story. Only if life was really like this, right? This poems flows very well, and creates a great picture ...
Nov 23, 2014 -
Re: This isn't revenge, it's love
Hi! This was a very interesting piece, and I am a sucker for romantic readings,happy ending or not. Here are a few things I wanted to point out to strengthen ...
Nov 23, 2014 -
Re: If I Could Go Back In Time
Hi! This is a very relate-able piece. I think everyone has a felt a need to fix their wrongs at one point or another. I really enjoyed the flow and ...
Nov 22, 2014 -
Re: Em101Cats's Life Tips!
Hi! What a great idea! I love acrostic poems! Here's a few suggestions to make it even better: Express yourself freely! Make a good first impression! 1 million mistakes = ...
Nov 22, 2014 -
Re: You know what?
Hi! I really enjoyed the flow and message of the poem. There were just a few things I wanted to point out: I used to cry, more than i do ...
Nov 22, 2014 -
Re: Fire and Ice
Hi!, I really like where this is going, how fire and ice are opposites but some how come together in the end. I don't really understand how the poem travels ...
Nov 18, 2014
