Pyxis

This made me laugh... it seemed to flow even though it didn't rhyme. Great Job! :smt038

This is, again, okay. I have two suggestions. SPACE. And I thought the dialogue during the song was a little weird. If you edit and SPACE, it could be really ...

I changed the beginning. Please tell me what you think.

Thank you for all the suggestions! I will keep them in mind when I write more. Yes, it is a continuation of the prolouge I posted. :D

I liked this. It was very sad, though. I am feeling bad right now, after reading this. I really liked this, but I wouldn't post only sad poems. 8/10. Keep ...

I really like this. Very dramatic. I would give it 9/10. If you edited it once or twice, it could be amazing! :D

I liked this... Very mysterious The ending was, I thought, unusual, but good. I liked the mystery. I would give it 8/10 :D

weird... the only problem is that you can only read it once. Then it's boring. But the first time it's good. It's creative and funny. I like it. :)

okay... I agree with what the others are saying. I liked it, though. Cute beginning, sad ending, odd poem. But not a bad poem. :)

Thanks for the suggestions! I will double space next time.

lol... poor toothbrush I agree, longer would be nice :lol:

I liked it... very funny. You should do more things like this with fairy tales :lol:

sorry i accidentally posted this twice :oops: :P

I liked it. I would make sure it wasn't too much like Eragon, it reminded me little of that. :)

Nice one! I loved Addie. It was very funny :D