Published March 9, 2008
Right on the back of my neck,
Completely sopping wet.
Soaked with spit and germs.
I make a face and turn,
To see him laughing,
and holding a straw.
I drop a napkin in my milk,
then bunch it into tiny ball.
Ha! Ha! I hit the jerk.
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This was actually super!
Oh my, I loved it. At first, I was a bit iffy about it because I thought that you're flow was a bit off, but once you read the end line, it all just slots into place and seems really cute, to be honest. One suggestion; try and vary your punctuation from just a plain old comma.
Ginge
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hehe, good job:) for both the poem and the napkin:)
This was funny. Sweet... sweet, revenge!!!!
Haha! This is a really cute short poem! I like it! No complaints.
~Yoyo
This made me laugh... it seemed to flow even though it didn't rhyme.
Great Job!