Young Writers Society

I didn't like this poem very much until the last line:

I am more alive when by myself.

I really like that last line, but other than that the poem seemed kind of pointless and very forced with regard to the rhyming and structure. Try to make it seem more natural.

The joy of being alone,
and watching the others on my own.
Sometimes people stare,
every now and then someone asks me to come over there.
But, usually I sit and glare,
and run my my fingers through my hair.

Your rather random idea to rhyme in these lines, and these alone, makes it disappointing. Rhyming can't just be done helter-skelter. There has to be a pattern, and a reason to it. Do you read poetry? If not, you should, if you do, notice how your teachers are always talking about the rhyming pattern? [If they're not, figure out what it is anyway.] You need to have a pattern to how you rhyme, otherwise it's pointless.

The idea was good, but...some things just didn't "fit" and I didn't feel get any feelings/emotions/thoughts when done reading the poem. When writing, try to think about what theme you want to convey, and how you should do it. Don't say anything that doesn't need to be said.
Like this line: "and run my my fingers through my hair. " it feels like you put it there just to rhyme, and finish the sentence.

I don't know... I don't like or hate it, I just think it could have been done better. And your one line, "every now and then someone asks me to come over there." is really long in comparison with the rest of the poem. Try to make everything fit into place when writing.