a to zzzzzzzzzz

by fishface

Published March 24, 2007

A
Bat
Cats
Diesel.
Elephant
Fantasies
Grow
Hickory,
Indonesia
Juxtaposes,
Kangaroos
Licking
More
Newts
Only
Pausing
Quickly
Rising
Slowly
Turning
Underwater.
Voluptously,
Weeds
Xerox
Yoking
Zygotes

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Blift
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Blift wrote a review Review · Nov 20, 2012

It's OK, but i'm not sure too many people will understand what you're trying to say, although I do agree with some of the other reviews, which is why i'm not going to like it.

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Myth-ology commented Comment · Apr 5, 2007

Wow! I think that was a great "poem". But it doesn't really look like a poem.

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PirateSarah<3 wrote a review Review · Apr 5, 2007

Aw i've seen one of these before :D I had to memorise one for drama. I think i could maybe still recite it :shock:

I'd love to try one of these.

Great job, i love your mostly clear story :D

veronicafletcher commented Comment · Apr 4, 2007

That was a good approach, but you need to be serious. Stop posting junk!

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kanajo12 commented Comment · Mar 27, 2007

interestingly different. unique but short lived.

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ConorR
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ConorR commented Comment · Mar 26, 2007

this is no poem it is simply a list of words in althebetical order plz write something a lot more serious!!

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Sureal
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Sureal wrote a review Review · Mar 25, 2007

Claudette wrote:Have you had problems insulting yourself before? Really, there it no need.


No no, she's done it before.

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backgroundbob
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backgroundbob wrote a review Review · Mar 25, 2007

I don't know what your intention was, but sadly anyone can stick arbitrary words into a list form. This is, to my mind, not poetry, because it lacks any of the technical aspects that present poetry effectively to the human mind.

My only suggestion is that you read some published poetry to try and get a sense for how things are done. Once you have some grasp of the basics you can try again.

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BohemeMistress
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BohemeMistress commented Comment · Mar 24, 2007

i like it. it's very interesting and i'm pretty sure i haven't seen it before. It's very creative, good job:)

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Leja
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Leja commented Comment · Mar 24, 2007

I liked it! At first, I didn't see that there were sentences within it; this could be fixed by paragraph spacing, if you'd like. Maybe see if you can connect the ideas more?

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Captin Six
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Captin Six commented Comment · Mar 24, 2007

I think it's delightful.

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Shine
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Shine commented Comment · Mar 24, 2007

Are u teaching some one A for apple and B for ball,in a different way?

This was definately something weird a nd funny.

Anyway try turning this into something else,that may work out well.

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Emerson
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Emerson wrote a review Review · Mar 24, 2007

Have you had problems insulting yourself before? Really, there it no need.

The idea of using the alphabet to structure a poem is intriguing, I'm not sure I've seen it before? But incredibly difficult because it looses all sense in the process. I haven't an idea of what you speak of, animals maybe? I think Ofour hit it on the head, calling it a list.

If you could actually turn this into something that made sense, using the alphabet, I'd be amazed. It's too hard.

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Ofour
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Ofour commented Comment · Mar 24, 2007

This is a list of words which happens to form an acrostic of the alphabet and it makes very little sense when read. Although it is unique and creatiive, it's not a poem, its just a list. Not much else to say really.


Gurby

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Pyxis
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Pyxis commented Comment · Mar 24, 2007

weird...
the only problem is that you can only read it once. Then it's boring. But the first time it's good. It's creative and funny. I like it.

:)

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fishface
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fishface commented Comment · Mar 24, 2007

[I wouldn't say it's poetry, it looks like nonsense.te="fishface"]A
Bat
Cats
Diesel.
Elephant
Fantasies
Grow
Hickory,
Indonesia
Juxtaposes,
Kangaroos
Licking
More
Newts
Only
Pausing
Quickly
Rising
Slowly
Turning
Underwater.
Voluptously,
Weeds
Xerox
Yoking
Zygotes[/quote]



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