PotterGeek101

I love the rhyming couplets it describes my days at school - well pretty much and i love it. the structure is perfect and flows well with the words. It ...

i love how this flows and it gives the reader a brilliant insight to the story. You've captured fear in here and i really like it as it kept me ...

i'm afraid this story didn't seem to grab me. it doesn't have a flow and i couldn't be pulled into the story, its more of an article base than a ...

i love the way this sounds in my head! The words are portrayed beautifully and i love the repeated words on each end of a line. Its got a beautiful ...

i don't think this is rushed at all i think it's quite beautiful and full of depth. i would just what out for using 'and' a lot as it did ...

The poem holds such beauty in description that it pulled me in perfectly. i loved it! The words fit in perfectly together and produce a flow, which makes the poem ...

it sounds kind of dramatic and down beat, making the reader feel dragged down by it. this is a good effect of emotive language as it engages the reader. But ...

I really love this, it holds so much tension and description and its full of emotions. i think the beginning draws and sets the scene so brilliantly! i love it ...

This got me confused and guessing what this thing could be for ages! i went from hamster, to a girl, to a hamster again then i gave up. This is ...

Now, i'm not a big fan of poems i can never understand them perfectly and they do not call to me as much as stories. BUT, this is the first ...

i am not really getting this story line. i can't seem to get my mind into it, as it doesn't seem to flow. But i loved the description on the ...

Okay, I am liking the whole dramatic, adrenaline pumping adjectives that are used it. It really gives the reader the sense of place and the sense of feeling. But just ...

oo! i quite like this script, it painted such a good picture of how the scene my play! Just one little alteration i think that you should put how they ...

I absolutely loved this so discriptive and full of power and emotion it's really good! It kept me going right until then end but just need to work on a ...

i absolutely loved this! so descriptive and full of tiny detail to drag and pull the reader in. i thought it was perfect it captured the reader well and held ...