Pernicus

I'm going to start with bluntly saying I don't like this story all too much at the moment. The twist ending was quite good but The descriptions are a bit ...

I like this poem but I hate the narcissistic undertones and insinuations that you make.I do really hope this a joke and not a serious point of view because the ...

I really like this poem! meaningful and beautiful, it is one of the few I've seen on here that manage to pull rhyme off without a hitch. I always oppose ...

I like the start of this poem the most, it has genuine language and meaning. It is literal. The first three stanzas are the nicest. Towards the end when you ...

I liked the description you used throughout the piece. Describing the cable in nice detail. Some of the rhymes feel a bit forced, for example: "brown and dead and cold, ...

I really have no idea how to review this but let me give it a shot < . > I'll review it as a funny story instead of a horror ...

I liked the themes of this poem and the ideas. The execution however could be improved upon, for example using the word demolish doesn't really make too much sense in ...

First off I want to say I enjoyed the poem overall. I also understand why you wrote it. As someone who has experienced loss first hand like you I know ...

I really love this poem, I can see a story of being lost in life and found in love. A dream I think we all share, the perfect individual who ...

I know the feelings you feel. The hollow emptiness is exactly what I felt as well. Its like you said, all consuming and infinitely deep. My father passed away last ...

I really like the poem! Descriptive and metaphorical and maybe even a little allegorical. It is a logical train of thought and well executed. I like that you don't restrict ...

Hello again :D I do like this poem and it does stick to a coherent theme. I like your use of repetition with "Something's broken". Once again there are a ...

I really like the rhymes in this poem. Especially the ones about how people don't want to be your friend for who you really are. I think this is more ...

Well written and I like the suspense at the end, whoever this Fenrien Halstone character is she is definitely familiar with him which will make a part two interesting to ...

An oddly short prologue. The spacing is also rather odd in terms of the seemingly random spaces. I know you intend to create tension and suspense by spacing the short ...