Ah, one of those poems where you can interrupt different situations, just what I like! And oh, is this a good one! And, the best part is, there is not a single thing with this that I would change. Not. A. Thing. It's short and simple, it gets to the point, but it's worded so brilliantly.
I totally get it. Or, at least what I am getting out of this is: starting something new for the first time. Or, something that you've done so many times and having to start back up again. And, when I say I totally get it, I feel for this poem, man. Referring to the mind and muscles as if it were an old machine was brilliant. I seldom find it in work I have seen lately. And, you used it well, which is a bonus.
And, those last three lines really stuck with me. Forcing a smile, trouble breathing, and just plain tired of it all... I can totally relate to that and I'm sure others can as well. Those were powerful words that were perfectly placed, my friend.
Just beautiful. I really enjoyed reading it and I look forward to see more of your work possibly...? Keep it up and great job~
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