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Hey Birthday Hangman! It's nice to see you posting work - you've been part of the site for ages by your join date! I've read Deanie's review and I have ...

Hey Klennon, I see that this is the start of you breaking up your novella into more manageable sections, I had a quick look at Rebel 1 and saw you ...

Ohai Xilla, You must be sick of me by now! But this is your last posted chapter so you will finally be done with me! "Of drums" is unnecessary in ...

Yo Xilla, We're plugging along aren't we! I like this chapter mostly because she's finally getting out of there. It's definitely about time and I'm pretty pumped for the narrative ...

Hey Xilla, Omg thank heavens you've given us some really strong background regarding Jamin because I was desperate for it, as you've no doubt gathered from my other reviews! It's ...

Hey Xillabobilla, This is such a great slip into Linna's psyche and the awful way she hates herself and you've done it really well, I feel for her in waves ...

Hey Xillabot, You're right when you suggest you don't have Jamin's voice down yet. At least, it's definitely not translating through the text into something I can get behind. It's ...

Xilla! Xilla, Xilla, This is your best chapter so far. Your descriptions are finer with a better grasp of realism and your imagery is very effective. I feel there is ...

Hey Xilla, I'm enjoying the progression of the story thus far, I like that you're giving small hints tho I still recall you'll expand chapters later, which is actually a ...

OHAI XILLA! You hollered at me to read this and I am here and have read this, the first chapter! (go me) I'm going to lay into you now. I ...

Hey Joalover, I like what you've written here and I'm so glad you decided to post this. Poetry is often hard to write, so I'm always excited when members decide ...

Whoa, what's this? Me again??? Yo, Mess. I'm going to pick out three nitpicks and that is all the nitpicking I will do because I hate nitpicks and that's up ...

Hi Meherazul, Welcome to the YWS and thanks for being brave enough to post your poem! I know it can be very daunting to lay your work out for everyone ...

Hullo earendil, I've seen you around a lot but I'm not sure that I've ever commented on a poem of yours? If that's true, then this is a first for ...

Hey Chekwube! You have a nice short poem here, and I'm really happy to be having a look at a short poem! I think there's a particular kind of skill ...