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Hi drinkonthemoon! As Lycando says, since this is a short taken from your novel we don't have much context to work with, so I'm going to have to fill in ...

Hi Harshita! This is an incredibly short prologue! Even though you're writing a prologue it really should be the same length as the rest of your chapters. If you can't ...

Hi there! I think reading over this I have to assume you're doing a post-modernist take on the poem. What poem isn't post-modernist in the current age? No poems are ...

Hi Mary! So I really rather like this poem! You have a good tone and I think you have a good story going on here. I hear the two narrators ...

Hi anna! This is a cute little poem with a side edge of sadness! I like what you're doing with the mix of Neverland and Alice in Wonderland, because they're ...

Hi Asorted! I like what you have going here! It surprised me a little because I didn't expect to be into the story, since the title didn't grab me too ...

Hey Shin! So I'm going to review this and get it out of our wonderful Green Room, you're taking up space! It's hard to review what is a silly, very ...

Hi Nike! I love the voice in this, particularly the "unless you want me to die because it just cracked me up. I think this is probably a humorous piece, ...

Hey Prettyface! This is a nice short poem, and I think you meant a poem rather than a set of lyrics! Which isn't to say these wouldn't work as lyrics, ...

Hi lovrr, I like what you're doing with this piece here, you clearly have a way with words and a way with description. You're using a lot of emotion to ...

Hi Kaya! I’m here to review this prologue of yours! It took me some time to decide to read all of this one. Your beginning is very slow and vaguely ...

Hello again! Here for the most recent instalment of your tale! So the form of this is working against you even worse here. The phrasing is muddled and we have ...

Hey Naturesgirl I read and reviewed your last chapter and I’m here for the next! I liked Tilly last section so let’s see how it goes. In this section, we ...

Caddington! I liked this so so so much! I thought maybe I wouldn't because it seemed a little choppy to begin with and I generally despise song fiction. However, you ...

Hi there! I noticed part of your novel is waiting to be reviewed so I came to the start to get a better feel for the story and the characters! ...