PenguinAttack

Hi FrancescaFromThePast, This is an interesting piece but for me it isn't working out. I understand what you're going for, but I think that the convoluted way it's actually expressed ...

Hi Chickory, I love this! I'm so thrilled to read something I'm so immediately enamoured with. You start very strong with a poetry that immediately touched me and kept me ...

Yo, yo, yo. So Hannahbobannah has given you some solid comments and we are not in line on this even a little bit, because as I'm pretty sure you know, ...

Yo Elysium, I hope you're having a good sleep! You linked this in chat before you went off and I thought I'd have a look at it. I like the ...

Yo Forticuno, As I said earlier in chat, this poem has a very nice heavy disquiet to it that I'm a very big fan of. I also really like what ...

Yo Rubric, As requested I'm here to check out what you've written, and thus writing my first review in ages, congrats to you! I see what you mean about the ...

Hey Wyatt, So I'll lay down here what I was talking about in chat. I like that this is an observational poem, I feel like it's a comment on Summer ...

Yoyo, Tulip, Following on to this chapter from the last! I like that you leap immediately into the action of your story, it really helps to push the story along ...

Yo Tulip! I know you linked this forever ago and I'm just getting to it, I'm so sorry! Firstly, you've a typo in the second sentence, which I think is ...

Hey Eli, It's nice to see you working on a novel rather than a script, it's always cool to branch out a little bit and see what's going on in ...

Hullo EmilyStarks, You have an interesting beginning to the story and I think it is very clear that you know exactly where you want the next chapter to be going. ...

Hi Valerye, I love the concept of your poem! I'm not a huge fan of Romeo and Juliet, and this is a take on the story I haven't previously come ...

Guuuurl, So you already know I like this - or I think you do! Anyway, I'm hella into this. I think it's beautifully written and you've melded the two forms ...

Hullo Swordsman, You have a very detailed, exacting story here. I like that you've kept good hold on your characterisation and that your story doesn't veer away from it's eventual ...

Hullo Canete, I can tell you've put a lot of work into writing this story, it's full of details and little facts about each of the characters. At the moment ...