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  • Poetry » Narrative, Dramatic Re: The Boy

    That was fantastic! I love the mystery surrounding the boy and that you didn't explain why he was walking in the first place, at least not outright, so there is ...

    Dec 15, 2012
  • Short Story » Horror, General Re: My Little Invalid

    Wow. Just... wow. I was hanging on every word, completely engrossed in the story. It was like I was not even in the room anymore, but standing next to her, ...

    Dec 7, 2012
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Other Re: Pop the Fairy

    I have to say that was a good kids' story. The only critique I have is that if you are going to have some of it rhyming, then you should ...

    Dec 7, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: I wish that someone could answer my questions

    Wow. This was an amazing piece of poetry. I loved the repitition of 'I wish' and the questions in between. I loved that it had very steay rhythm while still ...

    Dec 1, 2012
  • Article / Essay » Narrative, General Re: Rant On Society

    That was extremely truthful, and I can't agree more. Women today are seen by most- I can't say everyone- as sexual objects. Violence is running rampant and we need to ...

    Dec 1, 2012
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Horror Re: Violet Wonder

    Let me just start out by saying that I loved this story. I am a big fan of post- apocaliptic sci-fi, and I love well written post-apocalypic sci-fi. This is ...

    Nov 17, 2012
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Shackles

    Wow. Just... wow. I loved the imagery that this gives, the message, is wonderful. I completely understand the shackle of society and think that it is a great choice of ...

    Nov 17, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: Writer's Block

    I can absolutely relate to this. I have quit many a novel and even a screenplay because I had no idea what was going to happen. Generally what I do ...

    Nov 17, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Cuando Llueve (When it Rains)

    Hola. Me gusta la poema, pero la fue un poco dramatica por me. Yo sentio que esta a veces pero me no gusta que dramatica lo fue. Yo amo la ...

    Nov 17, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, Realistic Re: El Saber

    Me gusta tu poema tambien. La fue simple pero la fue muy interesante y conmovedor. Me gustala mucha. Yo estoy de acuerdo completo con la poema y que la dice. ...

    Nov 17, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Chapter 1 - Unexpected Guest

    That's very intersting. I'm certainly intised to keep reading, and very intregued. While this work may need a little tweaking, you have artfully given away just enough information to intise ...

    Oct 24, 2012
  • Other » Narrative, Realistic Re: Rant of a Calculus Student

    I loved this! I really like comedic poetry, or rants. I actually wrote a similar poem to this which was entitled "I Hate Algebra", which ironically, I wrote in math ...

    Sep 12, 2012
  • Short Story » Realistic, Health Re: SICK

    That was very interesting. I really liked the repitition in it, it really drives in the thoughts and feelings of the author. It's almost like a synopsis, but filled with ...

    Aug 22, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Narrative Re: The Distortion of Punk

    That was great! I honestly love punk music, and listen to it all the time. I thought that the poem completely described and examined what punk music really is. The ...

    Aug 14, 2012
  • Poetry » Literature, Science Re: The Scientist

    I find this poem very interesting. For a while, I myself was a self-proclaimed Atheist. However, you are also insinuating that ALL scientists are Athiest, which is not true. Honestly, ...

    Jul 29, 2012


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