PaperNessa

Morrigan, I disagree. There is no defined cadence, and this work reads like a narrative. It is limited in poetic devices and possesses more descriptive words. There's no rhyme scheme ...

Thank you so much for the review! I really appreciate it. The reason why the commas are lacking in some of the lines is because they are enjambments that have ...

lmao i actually thought of this poem when i was doing an art piece with charcoal (which is chalk) on paper. the chalk got all over my fingers and i ...

Who the heck are you to judge, Stranger?

This isn't a review; although, I may come back and review it later. I feel lazy at the moment and just wanted to tell you how much I appreciate the ...

Much better! It flows really well now, and the rhymes are less apparent. I think there's a skill in having rhymes but not emphasizing them. The only lines I would ...

I disagree with Cleverclogs on one point: I think the last line is perfect - it was meant to break the rhyme scheme for comical effect.

I read this short story earlier today and have had some time to think about it. I would love to take this idea and elaborate on it into something with ...

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For starters, I strongly disagree with Lady Spark about the long-windedness of the poem. I loved the premise of it being a long, unabridged thought (because really, don't humans think ...

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I had to read this a couple of times to understand the nature of the poem. I wasn't quite sure if there is a deeper meaning hidden between these lines ...

I agree with Firestarter. I can't review this work because I can tell it is extremely personal. To be honest, if it were me, I would have posted this in ...

Thank you for the input. I didn't write this poem with the intention of making the vocabulary "dumb enough" for my friends and family to understand. I wrote it to ...