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Re: Nevermore: A Hero's Rising - Chapter 1
Hi, kman134! Pan here to fry up a review. I like this opening. It took me a while to settle into it, but once I did I started to really ...
Jun 4, 2017 -
Re: The Ice Queen Chapter 2
Hi, DragonNoir! Here to review as promised. I have read the first chapter, but seeing as there are already three reviews on that I thought I'd just critique this one. ...
Jun 4, 2017 -
Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 7
Hello again, DragonNoir. Another cool chapter. Fox continues to have some great one-liners and the action is still building, and I definitely noticed far less dialogue errors here than I ...
May 28, 2017 -
Re: The Awakening, Chapter I: Answers
Hi, zeroZyra! Pan here to boil up a review for you. Interesting premise! I like the dynamic between the characters, and amnesiac protagonists are always mysterious. Generally speaking, you hold ...
May 25, 2017 -
Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 6
Hi, DragonNoir. Time for another review! Starting by addressing the author's note, I'd say that this part of the story is anything but boring. It might not be as full ...
May 24, 2017 -
Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 5
Hi, DragonNoir. Back again. Well well well, I was not expecting that. I know you said something dramatic was going to happen in this chapter, but I didn't realise it ...
May 20, 2017 -
Re: The World's Bank
Hi, Dracula! Pan here to fry up a review. I do have to agree with Sweetsinger that this isn't really a short story, because there's no real plot to it. ...
May 19, 2017 -
Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 4
Hi, DragonNoir. I'm back again for another review. The quality of the prose in this piece is probably the best of all the chapters so far. I like that you ...
May 19, 2017 -
Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 3
Hi, DragonNoir! Back for a second review. I think this is the best chapter yet, definitely. It's better paced, and you take more care to pause and dwell on quieter ...
May 15, 2017 -
Re: Que Sera Sera Chapter 2
Hi, DragonNoir! Pan here to fry up a review for you today. I went back and read the first chapter to ensure I'd be up to speed for this review. ...
May 14, 2017 -
Re: The Hunters Arena
Hi, lightbombhunter! Welcome to YWS! Pan here to fry up a review for you today. Well, I don't normally make a habit of reading six chapter works in one sitting, ...
May 10, 2017 -
Re: Chapter 1 - Jack
Hi, Silberfee! Pan here to sauté up a review for you. Solid opening. Your writing style is effective, the sense of character and plot seems very grounded, and I don't ...
May 9, 2017 -
Re: Welcome to the Show!
Hi, Ineedy0u. Pan here to boil up a review. I love the darkness of this piece. It's full of mystery, and it relates to a very powerful fear that all ...
Apr 28, 2017 -
Re: His Story, Not Mine
Hi, WinnieIsNotABear. Pan here for a quick review! This was a really interesting read. You roped me in, and I knew within a few sentences that I was going to ...
Apr 26, 2017 -
Re: how many cyberpunk tests am i gonna do? who knows. warning: lots and lots of bad language.
Hi, Jyva. Pan here to fry up a review. Wow. It's a rare thing on this site for me to be so hooked in by a piece that I almost ...
Apr 25, 2017