Noelle

Hi there! I saw this chapter in the Green Room so I thought I'd check it out! I made sure to read the rest of the chapters before getting to ...

Hi there! Me again :3 So, just a general observation here, your transitions between chapters could use a bit of work. I know that it can be hard sometimes to ...

Hi there! I know it's been a while since this came out, but I saw you posted chapter 5 so I figured I'd come catch up! :) Panic overwhelmed me. ...

Hi there! Just a nitpick here: Except for the quiet hum of a girls voice. A beautiful one, with a soft lilt and vibrato to it. I feel like this ...

Hi there! That night, what with the schools being out I think you could be a bit more specific with this sentence. Why exactly are the schools out? The problem ...

Hi there! The Davies family were perfectly normal, The 'were' here should be 'was'. See, the English language is strange. We're taught to use 'were' for multiple people. However, since ...

Hi there! This was very interesting to read and most definitely gave me all the information I'm sure I'll need once I get to the later chapters. There's not any ...

Hi there! Welcome to the site! ^_^ This is very well written. Like, super well written. So I'll be kind of nitpicking my way through this piece. I usually don't ...

Hi there! Oooooh, a chapter from Mercy's POV? I'm excited! This should be good. Even from the first few paragraphs, it's apparent that Mercy is growing as a character. Yes ...

Hi there! I'm back again :3 I find it very interesting that Layla is struggling against her own mind, with Mercy and all that, but she is able to see ...

Hi there! So, there's one thing I'm wondering right now. How exactly is Layla communicating with Mercy? Is all of this talking just in her head or is she actually ...

Hi there! I was going to review the first chapter, but I decided not to since you already had so many great reviews. I didn't want to waste your time ...

Hi there! I'm getting closer and closer to the latest chapter! :) Oh gosh, Viper knows Nikki?? I never would've guessed that one! From the way he reacted, I was ...

Hi there! Ah, so this is where we learn exactly what the characters were supposed to do once the distress call went out. I was going to mention that in ...

Hi there! Oh gosh, Naomi is like, one of my all time favorite name. So pretty. I love it :) It was in the exact centre of her brain, where ...