Noelle

Hi there! Noelle here to review as requested. The first thing I have to say is that this is one large paragraph. I personally hate that because it's hard for ...

Hi there! The title definitely suckered me into reading this piece. I love the title. :) Review time: And missing it once, is one time to many according to Scott ...

Hi there! Whoa, that last part was pretty intense. I like your description of the woman, how she lit up and made the attackers nervous. If I didn't think she ...

Hi there! Okay, so I was introduced to a bunch of new characters and I'm still trying to figure out how they all fit into the story. Maybe the next ...

Hi there! This is a very interesting first chapter. I'm not really sure where this story takes place or who this Lucas guy is and why he felt the need ...

Hi there! Review time!! :) After we are brought in to the Justice Building, we are each sent to a seperate room. I don't know much about Cato, other than ...

Hi there! I'm so in love with the Hunger Games it's not even funny. So of course I really love this. No matter how "bad" you claim it is (which ...

Hi there! Again, I have to say your descriptions are great. I can see everything you've described perfectly. Too little description is bad and too much description is just plain ...

Hi there! I think it's interesting how each of the different organs work. I like how you explain it all too. You don't just have the demon boy say, "Well ...

Hi there! Whoa, the last part of this is intense. The part after Flo wakes up is just amazing. And I like how you added Anne in there. It really ...

Hi there! I like how Leno punches Tyson. That really shows his emotions. From that I can tell that Leno is really upset about Joe dying. I've always noticed that ...

Hi there! I'm super interested to know what happens next! You left me hanging! I wanna know! Ah! Okay, now onto the review: This is a good prologue. In this ...

Hi there! This chapter is better than the others. I can tell that you read the comments that everyone made and used their suggestions to make this better. I'm proud ...

Hi there! Whoa, this was an action packed chapter. I like that. Poor Sam though. I didn't think anyone was actually going to die! Or maybe I was just hoping ...

Hi there! I really like this chapter. I learn a lot from it. It's also a relief to me that Flo has made a friend and that friend believes her. ...