Nightlyowl

This poem is cute, but it seems a bit... immature. The rhyming seems forced and makes this seemed like a jig type of catchy poem one might sing with a ...

I really like this poem. It's deep. However, now that you've gotten a good poem, you've got to work on the format. Like a story, you need punctuation and capitalization. ...

I think this is very well written, and that the idea is good. However there are some things that can be worked on. The first thing and most important, is ...

I think this poem is beautiful and written so well it's just... fabulous. It captures the feelings of what it's like to long for a virtue we should always have. ...

This poem is very... rough. It's not very cohesive and it's very out there. It seems like you were just kind of meshing a bunch of things that you thought ...

Hi again! Nightlyowl here! So uh... this one I didn't like as much. Well actually let me rephrase that, the second stanza I loved a lot, the first one, not ...

I really love this poem. At first, it bothered me that it sounded more like a story, but then I really liked it. It's like Beowulf which I also like ...

I really like this. The story is good and the flow, for the most part is well done. I do like the flow, I do but a few times it ...

Well, this poem has a lot going on. 1) Your first stanza was well written, it flowed perfectly. But you started to lose your rhythm and your flow as you ...

Ok, 1) This should really be formatted as a poem. I liked what you wrote, but it was really really hard for me to catch the rhythm and get into ...

I think this is lovely, and well written. But I do have some things that I question. 1) why are some things italicized? I didn't get the vibe that either ...

This is said and beautifully haunting. I loved the way you told the story. It got confusing at parts, I didn't know what was a flash back and what wasn't ...

Ok! So this is a great start. I actually really like where this is going. I do have some comments though. Your paragraphs are too short and lacking any detail ...

Ok! So Nightlyowl here with a review. First of all, not a bad start. However, there is room for improvement. For example: "The crickets chirped happily as the sun slowly ...

Wow... ok so... wow. I really liked this, even if it was... disturbing. I also liked how you formatted it like a poem all centered and nice and neat and ...