black white black white grey

Hello there I'm trying to write a short review for this poem:

I like the idea of this one, nice flow of words and it is really good,
only I'm not into chess but Life is a game so I see that in this poem.

I play with Life heheee, no I'll be careful but you are very good in writing
Poetry.

'' in chess we see the knights move

the kings move

the queens move

instead of the grey pawns

that cannot see the squares

who step out first

and last ''

I like this piece because I see those kings and queens also in us, Human. We move forward, backwards and do that slowly but sometimes very quick. I like this,really. I see this chessgame also like the Life I live. Sometimes we just must say that we win, because we always do.

Wow, this is a a really unique idea, that I enjoyed reading, however there were a few things that bothered me so here I go.

I loved your word choice and the structure of this poem, but in this line, "they do not shatter, crack," it might be a little smoother to read it as "they do not shatter or crack."

Did you mean to intentionally write it with no capitals?

Anyway, I'm just going to guess this poem his about the struggles in life, i. e. wars and the like, that are started by the ones who don’t necessarily know what they’re starting? Sorry, this short!

Hope you keep writing poetry!

This is neat. Reminds me of a somewhat often quoted bit of Nietzsche about "man's growing inwardness" (the usual translation, somewhat odd but understandable). Basically, people taking out their unacceptable urges by turning them inward. The theme is also obviously about getting rid of shades of grey, like people don't have to think about whether what they do is good or bad. That reminds me of someone I knew who said he'd only let children watch Disney because there should be clear good guys and bad guys. But chess isn't vaguely like real life unless you're using people like pawns or something, so it just cuts out the parts where you can't tell. "You are not one of them" seems like it's obviously about powerlessness so that fits well with the other two things I said.

Hello! DragonNoir here for a review!

Wow. Just wow. This is amazing!! I play chess quite often so I can relate to this poem a lot. But it also resembles real life as well, which I think is awesome. To be honest, you should add capital letters at the start of each line and add some punctuation to make it flow better, rather than having it as a constant enjambment.
Other than that, everything is great! That last line is really hard-hitting and I love it!

Overall, a fantastic poem, but you could work on your punctuation.
I hope my review helped!

I really like this poem. It's deep. However, now that you've gotten a good poem, you've got to work on the format. Like a story, you need punctuation and capitalization. It's alright if you make a whole stanza the equivalent to a sentence, but we have to be able to see that. Also, you don't have to put those dashes between stanzas. In fact, I'd take out the space between the stanzas as a whole, and just make it one large poem. It could work that way. But you'll have to punctuate it to make it more easy to follow. It'll also keep it from sounding like one giant run-on sentence. All in all, this was a very good poem and I loved it. Just work on the format, and you'll be golden. I'd love to read more of your poetry, especially if this is your first poem and you're already this fluid in writing. Hope that helped.

~ Nightlyowl

Unless we play wizards chess
Sorry, I have to make a nerdy reference with everything.

Despite my terrible joke, I really like this. It's really beautiful to think about, and you used figurative language really well, without creating lines that were so abstract that their meanings were lost on the readers. Rather, you were very well grounded throughout the poem, giving the reader a detailed view into what you were writing, rather than shutting out the reader. Which, is really hard to do, so great job.

You also use enjambment very well, which is super exciting.

See, this is the kind of poetry that belongs on the Spotlight, this makes me happy to see a poem of this caliber residing in those ranks so often held by two line anti-poems. So, thank you for making me very happy. This was a very skilled piece of writing.