white lilies shouldn't be so cruel

I love this poem! I am new on here and this is the first thing I have read and I'm glad I have! The last few lines where it says "but I am certain that flowers do not need tears to grow." That really made me feel for whomever the person planting the flowers is. This is a great poem!

I love what you have done here turning some thing iconic like flowers into murderous killers. a lot of people say poem's have to rhyme but that's not true. Are you implying that the tears are making them murderous?. Its cool how you hade it start out normal and slowly it turned stranger and stranger over time. I really enjoyed it and I ma now following you can not wait to see more.

-TGS

This was a good poem. It delved deeper into a seemingly mundane task and revealed the past sorrows of the neighbor. The wording and your writing was eloquent and went right along with sad story this poem tells. It was an intriguing read especially because gardening and flowers aren't usually associated with sadness or death, but you were able to bring a concrete object or action and associate it with an abstracts situation of feeling in a new way. I would try to find a different word than "imploded" because the use of this explosive word is a little strange surrounded by the rest of your deeply felt and melancholy writing. It just felt out of place. The ending "and neither do babies" leaves you wondering more about the neighbor's full story and finally gives the reader the missing puzzle piece to her sadness. Keep on writing, this was a great poem!

I really love this poem. At first, it bothered me that it sounded more like a story, but then I really liked it. It's like Beowulf which I also like a lot.

Anyway! The only thing I'd work on, is capitalizing the words in the beginning of the sentences and the beginning of each line. Evan Beowulf is written like that. So you should fix that up because otherwise it looks like one giant run on sentence even though it's not, and it takes away from the poem.

Now, there may have been other typos, I couldn't really tell as the capitalization bothered me the most, but there was this one I did catch:
"on idea that she doesn’t grow" -> On idea doesn't make sense I think you mean one idea or on the idea, which I think is more likely.

Anyway, check that out and double check for any other possible errors. So all in all this was a fabulous poem.

At first, the last line confused me but that's probably because I'm sleepy. After a second I understood. I'm guessing she lost a child. Which is sad but makes for good poetry. I really did love this.

I love the image you paint and the fact that you take something beautiful like flowers, and twist them around so that you show that it isn't always a good thing. Especially when you over do it. It's like smiling when you're sad and making jokes, sometimes people can just tell you're just overcompensating, so I really really liked that about this poem.

So anyways! FABULOUS JOB! I'd love to read more of your stuff, and if you ever want me to review anything specific, shoot me a message!

~ Nightlyowl