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Lovely poem. Not exactly ground breaking but lovely. The imagery is a little overwhelming :P You really need to add some punctuation becuase if this poem was read aloud, the ...

Happiness, laughter, and smiles as well All sounding like a beautiful bell Ringing, Ringing all around Making such a wonderful sound On the second 'ringing', there shouldn't be capital letter ...

LOVELOVELOVE the rhyming scheme ;) We all know who it's about :)) EM illia MA ma mie

This is absolutely brilliant. I'm actually lost for words. You tackle it soo brilliantly. Kudos is in order :P The first ... Section?/Paragraph? is amazing. The sarcasm is really effective. ...

I am yours. Your eyes are an abyss. It's your, not you're. You're showing me that you can apply the rules of 'Your' and 'you're' in the last line :] ...

NATHAN ;) Love zee writing duude but you don't have to be soo depressing. Next time we're in the hub for maths or Summet, you WILL write somthing cheery-(full?). Hate ...

I completely with Yatta!'s comments. The speaker i'm assuming is either a mother telling her child not to let others influence her action (I apologise if i'm wrong) or a ...

First of all, the poem portrays a beautifal image of a person sitting on a window ledge, trying to draw. The dramatic ending of and I fade into thoughts of ...

A lovely little poem i think. The pattern of rhythm is quite complex as ebony put and i think it makes such a short poem seem quite substantial. The subject ...

Well I love this short poem. It fits with the holiday :) This poem is a little cliche but somehow that makes the poem. The sincerity of the wonder, the ...

'Maybe if I don't look at it,it will go away.Wash away with all my other worries that I've thought about today. Fade into the background, walk into the dark. Take ...

I like how this poem reveals the true subject only at the end. The slow progression in such a short poem is really good. The only things i would critique ...

I completely agree with RedBird. The ideas are great. If you edit it as suggested, this poem could brilliant. Don't doubt your poetry, plus practice makes perfect. The last stanza ...

I comletely agree about the whole college thing. If the girl was an adult, a majority would feel more comfortable in reading it. I love your descriptive vocab. :) :idea: ...

Good but really short, it could be a base for a poem or maybe if you elaborated on the piece and added more narrative, it would help alot. :idea: The ...