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  • Poetry » Fantasy, Realistic Re: Sleepless Thoughts

    Hmmm, maybe something like 'free thoughts' or maybe 'night is the time' sorry i suck at titles. I just use a line in the poem normally.

    Aug 24, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Life Goes On.

    Hey, this is good. It is nice and simple but has a good meaning behind it. You could have more figurative language and all that stuff, but it is still ...

    Aug 19, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Auction

    Hey, I love this, it is really good. I don't have time to review as I am of to school soon, but I just wanted to say that I really ...

    Jul 30, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Train Ride to Nowhere

    Thankyou, will fix the error right away! I am glad you like the poem. And yes that is Logan Lerman. We should start a fanclub. *follows you and stalks you.

    Jun 28, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Flower Girl

    Thanks and welcome to YWS. What do you mean the last line is worded a bit strange? I am happy to look at it and fix it, but I need ...

    Jun 23, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Flower Girl

    Thanks, I was sort of going for a child, innocent like feel to it, so the factthat you feel like it was babyish is great. Yet, like you said I ...

    Jun 19, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, Realistic Re: I am No Hero

    Wow! So, I really liked this poem. I don't know if I can say anything new because most of it has been discussed previously. Also because there is very little ...

    Jun 16, 2013
  • Poetry » Culture, Science Fiction Re: Geronimo

    Thanks for the review, I get what you mean about the poem. I think I'll work on making it more poetical because I don't like the idea of an essay. ...

    Jun 5, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Scattered mind

    Thanks heaps for your review. I am glad that you like it, I keep meaning to split it into Stanzas of four lines each. So a massive thanks :)

    May 1, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Seagulls

    Wow! I was just about to logoff when I saw you reviewed this. I'm flattered, I mean this is the first piece of poetry I ever wrote, so thank you. ...

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Scattered mind

    Thanks, I'm having an internal debate with myself whether to break it into stanzas. I think I might. Thanks for the review though :)

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: My Mummy

    Thanks heaps. I will fix the things you have mentioned.

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Scattered mind

    Thanks heaps, I appreciate the comment. Xxx

    Apr 27, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Lyrical Re: Guilt

    This is really good! I love it, the imagery is great and just everything about it. I would try to review it but I can't find anything to criticise so ...

    Apr 15, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Untitled, please help!

    You helped heaps! I get what you mean about adding more imagery and relating it to the book more. I will try it out :)

    Mar 5, 2013


Too often we crave the extraordinary in life, without even learning how to cherish the ordinary first. Friend, I promise you this: if you can learn to take joy in the simple mundane things in life, the extraordinary will take care of itself, it'll be on its way, hurrying towards you. But if you skip the first part, it'll ever evade you.
— Arcticus