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Re: She Stands Alone
very good!!! i like it very much..... :D quiet simple and very emotion, i can feel its very close friend too :D good work :D keep up the good work!
Apr 23, 2011 -
Re: Lost
WELL DONE!!! :D i like it very much :D:D, but there some fixes need to be done.you spoke about you inner thoughts more than the state of the event and ...
Apr 23, 2011 -
Re: patterns and peaches
WOW!! every time i read it i feel something new. i love it very much, well done! there is just the punctuation you should look to, but it's good. i ...
Apr 23, 2011 -
Re: This is Me
i think it got the meaning, but the flow isn't has its best emotion. try to reach inside you more! :D keep up, it's good :D:D:D
Apr 23, 2011 -
Re: Please People Stop Fighting
i agree with Sage about that stanza , it stopped the flow. i loved the message and i think every country in the world TODAY!! can relate to. i love ...
Apr 23, 2011 -
Re: Between us
We say things we never mean And we are good at falling back into a routine It just so happens that I am changing the dominos Rearranging, please stop falling ...
Apr 23, 2011 -
Re: False
Just not now for a better view, i think "But not now". Just won't add much with now in the sentence. Kind of how it hurts to know you gave ...
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: Pull the Trigger
i can feel th emotion of pain here, but i can tell you it's not selfishness. sometimes we lose our senses in the middle of our yearning voices, it could ...
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: The Boy Who Kissed My Hand: A Monologue
i want to be Stella, please.....................Please, please!!! :D i love it adore it, amazing! :D:D:D:D Keep up, write to us more :D:D
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: Hush
True passion can reflect here. AMAZING!!, i love it, i love the way it flows and the way you still believed you got to choose the wrong thing there even ...
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: Pretty Without The 'R'
Completely beautiful, i felt the words and the emotion within. my first favorite poem here on YWS.:D Keep up the good work :D:D
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: Floral stains, Cats and Love trains
Floral stains, Cats and Love trains I can almost smell the loneliness or is that just my future cats running around purring unstoppably communicating with me when humans cease to ...
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: A Masterpiece
that's a big advice to every girl or boy, still hesitated about how beautiful and amazing she or he is. it touches the heart Beautifully written , Simply a master ...
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: too scared to let you go
it's good, the song was aspiring. it just to be organized more!!!!!. use a word soft were to write then post it here, it helps :D anyway, Keep up!!! very ...
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: As I did, so did you
i agree with Esthar , the reader or the listener...... need to feel the emotions more than consistent curses. you should add something more in the end a verse. to ...
Apr 22, 2011