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too scared to let you go

by NaRachel


Bridge: I don't know what to say yes or no
All that i know is i'm too scared to let you go

Chorus:And we made every choice together
So how come you can say that it's all over.
Everytime i cried you were there so where are you now.
We didn't break we just drifted away
And i know it takes more effort to stay.
But everytime i needed you were there
So where are you now

Bridge 2: Hold my hand please don't let go
I'm holding on to your heart just so you won't go-o-o

Verse: we always needed breaks for this thing to survive
So when we'd come back we'd be more desperate and alive
So who says this isn't just a breath of fresh air before we come back inside
Hi how are you i'd go through the motions
Rarely did our conversations hold any emotion.
Maybe this is just wavering wobbling devotion.

Bridge:My mind says yes while my heart screams no
All that i know is i'm too scared to let you go

(Chorus)

Verse: I've said my words now it's time to decide
When my thoughts drift to you i try to cast them aside.
Because who says this isn't just a flower that's been compressed, crushed and dried.
My mind only hears your words in reverberations
As i try to hide it from harmful revelations
That threaten to change my mind as i wait here so patient

Bridge: I don't want to say yes i want to say no
Because i know that i'm too scared to let you go.

(Chorus)

Coda: You say it's up to me
It seems it always has been
My thoughts would be so different in a better scene
I crawl and force my way to the last hole of light
To keep our fire alight

Chorus: We make every choice together and i'm glad coz otherwise it'd be over.
Everytime i cried you were there and here you come now
Here you come now

You said yes then we said no
Now i don't have to let go.

Hold my heart don't ever let go
I'll hold your hand and never let go-o-o-o

Also could you guys comment on my title. Any other sugestions? :)


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Fri Apr 22, 2011 5:45 pm
NLPrincess13 wrote a review...



it's good, the song was aspiring.
it just to be organized more!!!!!. use a word soft were to write then post it here, it helps :D
anyway, Keep up!!! very good :D:D




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Sun Apr 17, 2011 8:15 am
dregymayfield wrote a review...



You want suggestions?
I suggest you carefully look over your work before you submit it. This had a lot of errors in it. Like missing comma's and things of that sort. Also what does "Coda" mean? Also, you shouldn't double space as well.

As for this song...well I'm sorry, but I didn't really like this song that well at all. It just didn't grab my attention much. Yes, I clicked in here to read what you wrote, but the song wasn't able to draw me in. It felt as though it was just going on and on.

Well, maybe your next song lyric will be better than this.





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