Myriadne

I really liked this, it has a great flow and your imagery is gorgeous! The only crit I have is that I personally don't like the last stanza, "City lit ...

This poem has potential. The way I see it, it is over-written. You are spoon feeding your reader what you mean. That said though, I am of the school of ...

This poem has potential but I think it could do with some tweaking. I like the first line of the first stanza, it got me intrigued. However I didint like ...

Not your best work. The biggest problem I have with this poem is it is too wordy, everything is overstated. Go back to feelings, even if you don't think there ...

Suicide poems need to be undertaken very very carefully, they can be good if approached in the right way, however more often than not they end up tacky cliched or ...

I really like the last stanza and the second half of the first stanza. I don't know why but the first half of the first stanza from "personally, I know ...

Nice poem, its sweet. Each time I'm sad, you're always there To solve my problems and listen to my deepest fears. Waiting to mend it all with a single kiss. ...

I liked this, you have captured feeling and that is often very difficult to do, good job! One small thing that is purely personal, I didint like the line "this ...

I love your use of languge, it is wonderful. Just a small nitpick though, She knew the second the shawl fell from her shoulders and the saw the purity that ...

Please post things one at a time. I will just crit the first one. I really liked it, it reminded me of Delerium from the sandman comics. Personally I like ...

I waited last night, My hair in place for you, Hours of finding a perfect top,

I am going to be blunt because I am tired. I think this has a lot of potential but as it stands it is very two dimensional. You don't really ...

I really love your opening image. I think the first three lines of your opening stanza are magical, but the last two lines don't really work for me, they seem ...

The best way I can see you improving this is by going back to the old adage "show it don't tell it." Especially in the first stanza, it seems too ...

I really like the first four lines. I didint like the last five lines as much because your poem takes on a slightly moralistic tone which I didint like. However ...