Monsters

You used a style of writing known for its wonderful rhythm. It is actually hard for the human brain to break out of the rhythm that the writer sets using ...

This is a mess of random disjointed pieces of your intuition. This does not lead to a coherent conclusion and thus these words together where a jumbled mess of saying ...

Yah know iggy, I'm going to be that monster that keeps reviewing all of your work. Here's the problem; I don't think ashes fit at all. Think about it from ...

I admire this and you, PenguinAttack. Still though- I've seen the phrase "clawed beast" before but I'm afraid it doesn't make much sense to me. Clawed is not really intended ...

Let us be honest, the title Where the Sidewalk Ends is basically stolen from Shel. Not only was that poem not very impressive you made it ten times worse by ...

what all our nature craves. This is a very ambiguous statement, and I think that you wanted something more straight forward. This could be interpreted as everything nature craves including ...

Well obviously the dove symbol is a little over-used, don't you think? These are cliche aswell; vast ocean of open sky lightness of the wind. Is it we that make ...

Okay well, it's not the worst I ever seen. First- a feverish haze: It simply doesn't make sense and also - you should probably remove haze and feverish from your ...

This is really good. I've seen you on the site but never actually read your writing; its not perfected but sometimes perfecting something takes the out some of the raw ...

hey ladyspark! criticisms - i have cracks all along my spine a mark for every time i stood up after a night that broke my back and shattered my rib ...

I can see YWS is still parading around mediocre poems- perhaps if something of quality hit the spotlight it would cramp the whole YWS style then someone might have to ...

Your image of a fawn comparing it to light is so interesting. I defiantly get what you mean and the images of both. You come off very sophisticated and emotional ...

I'm sorry @CaptainSaltWater but in my honest opinion this poem is pretty horrifically bad. I don't think you are writing for yourself but for other people; you can tell because ...

This poem is not particularly good because it starts to talk about concepts that are the most controversial - as in - most of the people that have been at ...

For your first poem I was impressed with the repetition of waiting, it sounds nice. Now you have this obvious error; [flash=]POP[/flash] . The poem has a lot of things ...