Monsters

okay so, Paths woven like Indian rugs on dusty lanes which are lined with twining trees. Your paths are woven onto dusty lanes? Umm, why does a path have to ...

Hmm.. don't really agree that the best perspective for this poem is 3rd person omniscient. I feel like if it where 1st person it would be more personal and contain ...

hmmm.. So this poem is designed like a speech but the flow of it is more of a contemporary lyrical sound. I don't think I like that. For one, the ...

I see this as something that just starts perfectly. The second stanza is your best, too me. It shows the reader that it is an obsession rather then a feeling. ...

1) Your symbol of the heart not beating is just cliche. You should possibly think of something more "yours" or more original. You having more not working hearts is thinking ...

hmm. I liked two things in this poem. The first is the way you tie abstract ideas to images. It makes it your own and original and is nice and ...

Parts of this are beautiful. It helps mask the awkward lines in the start, which really isn't all too bad. What you say makes sense and the clarity of it ...

I'm sure you'll hear alot about the title. A title such as "Untitled" serves little purpose to help enhance anything in this poem. A good way to think of a ...

This hardly conveys emotion. The use of repetition is usually best used to emphasize an important phrase or to build up an emotional response. In this poem you only effectively ...

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Wow so glad I am seeing articles! Although, I think the content could be improved by much unfortunately. For instance, joining a sport is major way to stay focused and ...

Hey Persy. There was too much to comment on this review so it seems a bit rushed and maybe condescending; if so, I am so sorry. I just knew you ...

The last one didn't come out well.. I'm almost afraid to ask. :P Wake up! You sleeping youths wake up. Wake up and receive your sight. Wake up with all ...

'ello. I love this poem greatly which is also why I wish to review it! I doubt anyone will and that's a shame. It deserves more praise from me 'cause ...

I thought that we were great companions, Meant to be from the start. I thought that we were like siblings, That we shared a beating heart. This writing style is ...