The Girl

Hiya! I'm not much of a poetry person, it doesn't come easily to me. This may sound like an incredibly weak point to make, but I love what you did with the shape of the words. I think it adds to the idea of simplicity here. The emotions I felt while reading this were very real, and I love that! I like your choices of words here. It's a little bit awkward, and I feel like that slowed my comprehension of it a bit. You may want to clean up the second stanza just so it has a more cohesive structure. You can't forget that these lines depend on each other; I know I do that sometimes. The "and" isn't really needed at the top of that second stanza, either, or at least, not in my opinion. All grammar aside, this is an amazing work and I can't wait to see what you do with it in the future

Keep writing,
Emily

Parts of this are beautiful. It helps mask the awkward lines in the start, which really isn't all too bad. What you say makes sense and the clarity of it all leaves almost all your readers thinking the same things which mean you sent an effective message and I heard it loud and well. So congratulations on making a piece of art. I’d have to disagree with the reviewer that it doesn’t make sense, it most obviously does. BUT it is a little awkward when you say it.
I’d just have to ask what it means when an angel dies? It leaves me thinking of questions which are unanswered because it seems as if you left your symbol to mismatch it with the real thing? Its hard to speculate poetry so I would ask yourself of a better way to say what you actually mean. Maybe using a better symbol then the cliché of the angle? Or describe what you mean when an angel dies?

The awkward lines which I’ve talked about are at the start. It’s just the way that you say it does fit well in your structure which is important in this piece but it lacks how people usually express what they say. Usually you would start by saying “she ceased to even exists because,” or another way that isn’t the way you have it now.

The emotion in this was amazing.
In just a few short sentences, you made so much emotion, it's outstanding.
Also, I don't know if you meant to do this, but the way you styled the poem, it sort of looks like wings.
It really tied into the:
"not every
angel is meant
to fly"
Beautiful.
The title was the first thing that caught my eye. Short titles usually lead to an interesting story or poem. I'm glad I got to read this. It's amazing.

"so what she
does she does
to die. "
This is the part that kind of got me. It's really sad to think that this girl does everything just to die. But as they say, all angels go to heaven. (Something a good friend of mine used to say.)

But all in all, this was beautifully done, and you should be proud of yourself. I can't wait till I see more.

This is a simple title for a simple work.

For the purposes of my review, I have ran the sentences together.

'She was so sad she ceased to even exist.
And not every angel is meant to fly so what she does she does to die.'

when you read the work like this it quickly becomes apparent that it doesn't really make sense.
Not only through a lack of punctuation, but also due to the fact that the grammar at the ending line is off.
This needs to be fixed during editing.

The subject matter of your work is rather provinicial. Whilst you have demonstrated your ideas clearly, ther eis still room for more sohphisticated development here.
Not necessarily by making the work longer, but by playing around with what you already have.

The formatting works the way it is, but you could also try playing around with that to see if you can make any improvements.

Hope this helps.
Sorry if I was too harsh