MissGangamash

Gotta love a first chapter in the Green Room! Okay, this is a very interesting beginning. You give just enough for me to get the sense that this is some ...

Hello! I saw this in the Green Room so I thought I'd check it out. I haven't read any other chapters so I'm just working with this chapter. 'Kai was ...

Hello! I have seen some videos of how service dogs help with sensory overloads and panic attacks, they are amazing! I agree with HarryHardy that you could definitely expand on ...

Hello! This was super spooky and had me jumping when I heard a nose in my living room XD Anyway, I really like the way this is written. I am ...

Hello! I am here to review! I'll note things down as I read. 'lonely sakura tree. It's lonely presence' - repetition. Perhaps swap for another word. 'unfamiliar to the mind... ...

Hello! Saw this in the Green Room, a first chapter, yay! Great opening line. It hooks the reader straight away. Some more description of their surroundings would be helpful. I ...

Okay, wow, that was... a lot. When they mentioned being a human dart board, I didn't think they meant LITERALLY. I agree with Pheonix, the brutal torture is indeed... brutal, ...

Hello! Okay, the tense is all over the place. Is this past or present tense? 'There was a man' 'He cannot smile' 'she's always looking away' - this happens throughout. ...

I haven't read anything else of yours and I've seen that this character is in your other works but I will just review this as a stand alone piece. Okay, ...

Hello! I'm not great at reviewing poetry but I am going to try. Okay, this is a very simple piece. Sometimes simplicity works great, but usually there's the simplicity and ...

Okay, I got an icky feeling throughout reading this whole thing. If that was intended, well done! There were so many red flags with George and the MC that weren't ...

Thought I might as well finish the chapter! 'She frowned a little and groaned, almost a breath.' - are you referring to the groan as being like a breath? Just ...

Hello! I saw this in the Green Room and the little description intrigued me. I haven't read any of the other chapters so I can only comment on this and ...

Hello! Not to say that this prologue is not intriguing, because it is. But it is quite cliche. Also, it reads more like a blurb than a prologue..? I don't ...

Hello! Here to review! I haven't read the other chapters so I'll just go off what I read here: Okay I'm a few paragraphs in and I've noticed that you ...