MissGangamash

Hello! I have not read the previous chapters but I wanted to help get this out of the Green Room so here I go! Okay, the first sentence drew me ...

Hello, here for a review! This could be a really good piece if you expanded it a little more. If you give the story a sense of place, like at ...

Hello! The formatting here needs work. Its very hard to follow dialogue when its all smushed together in one paragraph. Okay, this plot is WILD. I don't know if the ...

Hello! Here for a quick review. I've seen the other reviews have pointed out typos so I'll just talk about the story. After reading the whole thing and then rereading, ...

Hello! Gonna help kick this out of the Green Room! 'bruising the palms of their hands.' - 'of their hands' is redundant. '...before plopping down and ruffling through his back' ...

Hello! I'm not the best at analysing poetry so I'll just say I really enjoyed this! It was very funny and had a great rhythm to it. 'They say he's ...

Hello! This is a very well-written piece. I liked the little details you dotted through the narrative like, 'Grace’s mom believed that naming her kid after a princess and actress ...

Hello! I'm a little confused by the tense of this. Is the narrator saying that if their current reality was a fairy tale? It just reads a little odd because ...

Hello! Here for a review. I feel like a lot of people have dealt with these sorts of people in their lives. I think the first line would be better ...

Hello! Okay, I think I get the idea. He took a pill to experience complete happiness through a dream and now he's depressed because life cannot compete? It's a cool ...

Hello! Okay, I'll say straight away that poetry is not my forte and so I may be missing the glaring obvious, but I shall try to review! I really like ...

Hello! This was a really beautiful, simple piece. I loved all the intricate descriptions you used. A few nitpicks- You switch POV. You start in past then move to present. ...

Hello! I'll review as I read. 'Carlo looked over at me and the bell rang. He looked out the door into the hallway like he was being hunted. Then he ...

Hello! Here to review! 'The floor felt like it was freezing the soles of his feet through his shoes, and every slightly open window felt like a hurricane blowing through ...

Hello! Here to review! I like the opening, it's very simple and flows well. The focus on the predator waking alongside the main character gives me the impression that the ...