Midnightmoon

:D. Now for the review. The first line, I would just say "Sailing" instead of "Sail," and "Fight" to "Fighting." "Deceive" should be "Deceiving" and "into" should be "Onto." "Escape" ...

Hi there! This is a nice story! Mostly all I want to point out is some spelling errors, I'm rather picky about those. :). I hope you don't mind! The ...

Hi there! good poem! I only have a few suggestions. First off, Structure. "Not always the world is beautiful Not always the mind is zestful Not always the mood is ...

Hi there! I love this poem! I only have a few things I'd like to point out. It's just a few spelling errors. Sorry, but I'm a nitpick about that. ...

Hi there! I loved this piece. So, I'll dive right in. In answer to the first question, This piece, (to me) meant that one should not keep looking for light ...

Hi there! Okay, a really good poem, love how the simplicity reaches the readers heart. The biggest problem I had was with this line; "you broke my trust and now ...

Hi there! I'll answer your questions as best as I can. Number 1: I didn't think the ending was especially rushed, I rather enjoyed it. It was a nice ending. ...

Hi there! So I'll start with what I think should be fixed. First off, the black dots seem to indicate that someone is speaking, but at the last sentence you ...

WOW!! That is what I said when I read this poem. I Can't even describe how it made me feel. Just, wow. I have no suggestions or corrections to make, ...

Midnightmoon here. I don't think I've come across a more expressive poem! I really have no corrections to make. This poem is AMAZING! I love how you really make the ...

Hi there! So I'll start with what I liked about the poem, and then I'll make some corrections and then my overall conclusion. So, lets jump in! First off, I ...

First off, I did see that there is the edge of a point, but it's well hidden. Which isn't all bad, as the reader will make his or her own ...

Deep deep deep feeling! I understand the feeling. I really do. I really only have one correction. Put a comma before every spoken sentence, like this: "She said,"Now you will ...

Love the story line. I agree with the comment below, how you make sound like she was innocent. What gets me the most though, is how real you make it ...

I can definitely relate. The one thing I think would make this better is if you did it in sections. it makes it easier to read. Like this; "Have you ...