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Re: Nothing
Hey there! Here to review your poem for you. So, overall I really liked it. As previous reviewers have said, you did a really good job with the pacing and ...
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Re: luminous
Hey there! Here to review this lovely piece for you. Because this is so short and mostly perfect, I'm not sure I'm going to be much help, but I'll try ...
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Re: Insomnia
Hey there Adrian! I saw this a while ago and thought I'd review it today. It is, frankly, beautiful. I think you did the poem justice. I don't have a ...
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Re: We
Gonna say it straight up front: this is beautiful. It flows nicely, and reads well aloud. I'm just going make a few comments on formatting, since that's the main thing ...
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Re: They're Alive
Hey there! I love your poem. I know exactly how you feel, and in fact I've been going through something similar recently. I am absolutely in love with your second ...
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Re: Someday Fly
This is pretty cool. You have a gift for internal rhyme. I understand that you may want to not use a lot of punctuation for effect, and I see why. ...
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Re: Tinkles of the past
Ooh, this is pretty. I love nostalgic poems. I love your imagery - it's really clear and powerful. Overall, I think your content is really good, so I'm just going ...
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Re: Amen III, IV
Hi there! These are really beautiful. I love haikus when they're done right. It's amazing how a simple seventeen syllables can capture the essence of life. Frankly, I don't have ...
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Re: Fear Itself
Hi! I'm going to say it straight up: this was beautiful. Let me know when you film it, and I'll happily watch it. Unfortunately, because it was so pretty and ...
Apr 26, 2015 -
Re: This does not exist anymore 3
Hey there! Your description is really strong. I loved all the imagery. However, since you asked, I didn't really get the sense that the person was living with an addict. ...
Apr 26, 2015 -
Re: there was a time
Wow, this is really beautiful. I don't have a lot to say about it overall, because it's just so lovely, so I'll just go through a couple nitpicks. I like ...
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Re: Override
This is really awesome. It's a great dystopian short story. I especially love how creative expression was banned, but it was older people who tended to break that rule. Generally ...
Apr 26, 2015 -
Re: We do not ride. We dance.
Hey there! This is a really pretty description piece. I haven't really heard of a horse and rider dancing, and now I want to go see that. I love the ...
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Re: The Violin Bow
Hey there! Interesting poem you've got. The first thing I would have to say is to break it up into stanzas. Cleverclogs already told you how to do that, though, ...
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Re: Diary in the Time Gap
This is really cool! A great horror story, and very well-written. A few suggestions: I would put all the dates and times in bold or italics, just to distinguish them ...
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