Mars

Hey darko! Welcome to YWS. First off, this is quite an interesting piece. I like the way you took MLK's speech and made it into a poem. However, there are ...

Hello Henry! kissthewitch here, ready to review your poem. There are a few mechanical things to sort out, so I'll start with those: So I've been there at a certain ...

*blinks* Wow. I loved this. It's so simple, but every word means something. You know? Not one of those words is unnecessary. And it's a fairly quiet poem, but then ...

Hey Becca! Welcome to YWS. This is an interesting beginning to a poem-I say beginning because it's a little too short. True, poems can be any length, but this one ...

Hiya Princess! kissthewitch here to review your poem! First of all, just a couple things: But why [s]has[/s] have so many echoed with a single siren ' s blare. against ...

Hello ButterFlyInk! I'm kissthewitch, here to review your piece! First of all, is this a poem? It's written like prose, whereas poetry usually has more line breaks. Try breaking it ...

Hey! I'm kissthewitch and I'll be reviewing this tonight. First of all, as requested, the words: the only one I saw was 'music' in the very first sentence. But I ...

Hello to you too! I'm ktw and I'll be reviewing this poem...even if you don't pay much attention to it :) Hey there! This one is about how I feel ...

*points to above post* Nooooo!!!!! I was going to tell you to omit all your commas!! :D Okay, anyway, I liked this poem a lot-I thought you worded it well, ...

Ah...sorry. I would if I could, but it's too good to be ripped apart. I really liked this-I think you did an excellent job. On everything. Just one suggestion: Jaded ...

This was great. I'm a sucker for narrative songs, and third-person songs, so I really loved this. So, I can't find that much wrong with it and this review probably ...

Seriously? No one has reviewed this yet? I think that there are parts of this poem that definitely need work, but I was in a playful mood this morning, so ...

Hey beemarie425! I'm kissthewitch and I'll be reviewing your poem today. :) First, two little things: The sunset creates a halo on your hair The pieces of my heart shed ...

Another poem about my Dad for my American Lit. class. I have yet to get a grade on it, but I'll keep everyone informed. I still consider this a draft..but ...

I hope mine is reliable enough. :) First off, I'm correcting all your grammar in bold. I called and then again I tried until the moon grew full I cried ...