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It's a fairly good poem, it doesn't really have any standout descriptions or words which really would draw my attention. the words of which you define, I'm a bit puzzled ...

I think that you should consider the use of stanzas when you are writing, I think that this poem in several stanzas would work better than it does as it ...

I don't quite understand how Posideon, aftering having faded away because he was shunned by non-believers would produce and heir who would be so infinitely powerful. The poem sets up ...

The content of the poem is good - I don't think that using couplets was the best choice. The rhyme becomes a bit too obvious and it detracts from the ...

It's a nice descriptive poem, and I get the feeling of swaying from your line structure and rhythm - but at times I don't see the point of certain line ...

It's a very nice emotional piece. The first stanza and the use of questions and repetition works well. The questions draw the reader in while the repetition helps to build ...

The first stanza is very descriptive. How can such a place ever have been graced by whom i adore'd. I like this line, its unexpected and very direct. I descend ...

Very nice, the rhyme works well and is very good. I like the "your smell burns me to the soul" - it is an effective choice of words. In the ...

First of all I would like to say this is a very well written piece of fantasy. “Surrender!” his magically enhanced voice was heard by all. I think you need ...

A good use of questions, the poem makes the reader think. I can't really offer much constructive criticism. I like the rhyme of "see", "mortality" and "behind", "inside" - it ...

You use some very good rhymes, "her" and "Myrrh", "raised" and "amazed" just to name a few. Because the rhyme is so inventive it adds a new layer to the ...

Silence of the world surrounds Beating pulsing like a heart I think you need a comma in there or something, definitely between "beating, pulsing". These first two lines leave me ...

Okay, the content of the poem is good - you just need to work on the punctuation. The poem reads like a solid block at the moment if there were ...

Very nice imagery throughout the whole poem. Twirling we fall into ribbons of midnight gold A very nice phrase, adds a lot to the poem. Nice piece of contrast with ...

The rhythm is a bit off, you go from short concise lines to much longer ones. It might work if they were different stanzas but it just stops the flow ...