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Hi! Living and dreaming- This part doesn't flow quite as well with the rest of the poem, perhaps if you were to add 'then' between 'dreaming' and 'and'. Also, I ...

"Sprig Muslin" by Georgette Heyer, just like your book, it had a great storyline and was sooo entertaining, but the end was NOT satisfactory :( I was so disappointed that ...

I really like the way this poem is going, but it ends too abruptly, add some more to it! You could tell why you think the rain is raging, or ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! Now for the review: If tonight you feel what I feel for you, you can not imagine how happy that would make me. The ...

I like how this poem has a personal feeling to it that you can really relate to, it draws you in and holds you there until the end- love it! ...

Hi, Welcome to YWS! Just a few things I'd consider revising... I know when eyes meet and heart cross An electricity courses through us. "cross" and "us" have this flowing, ...

Ooooh, I liked this! And welcome to YWS! :D Short, sweet poems are my favorite, and the only thing I can find to correct in this is the loss of ...

Great job with this, I got a pretty vivid picture of...well... that ...and the head :shock: ...and the axe...and... :thud: The only thing, you changed tenses a few times, like ...

Nice job with this, the way you write reminds me of the 'Redwall' series by Brian Jacques, only with that the main characters are mostly mice, not cats :) You ...

Hi, Lexi, welcome to YWS :) First of all, I like the way your poem mixes inner feelings with seasons. It has a personal, hopeful feeling to it, kinda like ...

Nicely written, Forest, I like it! K', I've never read 'Twilight', since I suppose that that is the book Asylin is reading, (and personally, never intend to :P) but I ...

I liked this, True- you can really write well :) Ever felt the feeling of pure perfection? I think you started a bit fast, just my preference, but I think ...

I like your poem, it almost has a fanciful side to it- like a dream. Nicely done :D I went on a trip removed the comma To a place where ...

This is a great poem. I know, because I lost my grandfather a while back, as well... The constructive critisism is in bold :) When will I die? How will ...

Great poem! My favorite line You put your two hands together seemingly like in a prayer. I've seen flies do that and have thought the same thing! Review: How was ...