Published February 4, 2010
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it's horrible
it was painfull to read!!!
and there is nonthing els to say about it.
sorry but its the truth
I kind of get it- It makes me wonder what came down on you. I think you did use some good imagery.It is very cool:) I like your writing. It is very simple yet meaningful. Keep writing! I'll read your other one now!
~ Pacific
Hi fiction903
I thought that your poem was really good. The imagry was great and so was the language and fluidity. Very few writers have good fluidity when writing poems. The only problem I had with this poem was that it could have used more punctuation between lines. Other than that I think you have done a great job and I look forward to seeing more of your work.
-matt
This was really nice. Very nice images of turbulent emotions and weather.
Every word felt well placed. I like the philosophical elements and the overall sparse quality. Truly, this was wonderful to read.
Thank you for sharing this with us. See you around.
–antimelrose
I really liked this poem; I guess that's because how short it was. It was completely vague and left it on a loose end for interpretation. Also, I like how you didn't use the word grey at all during this poem, all-in-all it's short and sweet and to the point.
Look forward to reading more of your work...
Erin
Hey, if you don't want to add more, then don't!
I really don't like it when someone asks me to write more of a thing that I'd rather just let alone- I'm just saying that if you DO write more, I'd love to read it! ^_^
~Mel
I have no idea what it's supposed to mean it's a tiny little color poem I put together in literally two minutes because I was board. I thought it would be fun to leave it up to interpretation. I guess I can add to it if you want me to.
I really like the way this poem is going, but it ends too abruptly, add some more to it! You could tell why you think the rain is raging, or what it wants to understand- or... something like that
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I'd love to read more!
~Mel
I really like this poem! What I enjoy is trying to figure out what you could be describing. Good personificatoin of whatever it is though!
Need a space after the comma. I also would add some punctuation to then end of the lines. Just some simple commas would do the trick.