Lycando

Hey there! I like this story pretty much! But there are some parts I think you could have worked on better. First of all, the concept of this story focuses ...

Hey there! Alright this story was pretty confusing, and extremely fast paced, with the dialogue especially. First off, punctuation. I agree with Purple, there are certain sentences which need a ...

Hey there! Although this was short, it did bring forth a pretty powerful message, one that many of us can relate to. The childish innocence of being a winner, then ...

Hey there! Alright science fiction stories are somehow my thing! First of all I like the idea of this vaccine that makes a human perfect, it's not as cliche as ...

Hey there! Third chapter, here I am! First of all I find the story focuses a lot on the book, which I really like. Rather than talk about James's life, ...

Alright! I'm here to review! This is the first day in solitary confinement. I have been given neither food nor water. Ok I agree with alfred on this, this is ...

Hey there! Ok well I have to admit I did try to search for "The Game Chapter 4" before I realised you edited your work for every new chapter. So ...

Hey there! I've pretty much been a fan of mystery novels, it's the suspense that really gets me on my toes. However, a good mystery novel has to be logical ...

Hey there! Wow! This chapter was much more exciting than the first, to be honest. It's a very interesting way of developing your ideas and your style of writing is ...

Hey there! I liked this story quite a bit. It has some interest in me, but probably not enough to capture my attention, especially the first part. I shall explain ...

Hey there! I have to with Elinor on the first part. A seven year old wouldn't exactly be more interested in video games than going on a trip. Heck, he ...

Hey there! So I did enjoy this prologue, as short as it may have been. I feel there's no actual storyline here or a hint as to what the story ...

Hey there! So I like where this story is going, as I've been saying. It's getting more and more interesting. This chapter delves further into Auxi's background, which I think ...

Hey there! I like this story you have here! For me, I like stories that are out of the ordinary, in this case, a kid with an attitude problem and ...

Hey there! First nitpicks, since this is a pretty short story and I can pick the tiny details up! "Do you find it odd that the simmering thread begins to ...