Louisiana15

Hello! Louisiana here for a review! I found this very moving... First, I noticed spelling error: "fantasize" rather than "fantasise" in the first 5-line stanza. Next, I think you should ...

Hello! Louisiana here for a review! So, first off, a bold topic to discuss. One that is seemingly controversial. I am neutral in reviews, so if I say anything offensive, ...

HEY!!! Louisiana here to review your work! First off, I like the topic. It's moving; it's passionate. Second, grammar: So last stanza "alim" I'm pretty sure is supposed to be ...

I like this. I really like this. I'm a competitive singer and really into music so I always get excited when I read lyrics. The raw emotion is so innocent. ...

Woah. Hello there! This was a lot within a short amount. I was expecting more, honestly, but I kind of like it short :) First, in the first line, "mama ...

Hey Joey :) I know why you wrote this poem and who you are talking about so I have a great understanding of where your mind is with this and ...

Hi Amnesia. First off, I'm sorry about all of the pain and suffering you went through. Also, with your username and this poem, I thought of 5SOS's song, "Amnesia." Alright, ...

Hello!! First off, very nice poem :) To start with the first stanza, I found the line "The King Sun and the Queen Moon," awkwardly worded. It doesn't sound or ...

Hello! I love the imagery in this. And the message: so powerful. First, I think you should either stick to freestyle or follow a rhyme scheme. I found some areas ...

So, lots of tears I wish to shed from this--being cheated on is the worst feeling... I experienced it three years ago and this reminded me of the pain I ...

Hello! Such a beautiful piece! Correct me if I'm wrong, we're talking about labor. I like how you use the word drugs repeatedly--at first, I thought someone OD-ed but when ...

Hello! Wow, this was a lot shorter than I expected, but there is so much information and power. Understanding an eating disorder is so difficult because there are so many ...

Hi Annie. First off, I am so sorry for your pain. I am experiencing this as well right now. It's isn't the first time I've dealt with this, so I ...

Hello! Really, this was surprisingly enticing. I expected a more scientific/medical poem based on the title. Your imagery was very strong but I want more emotion. I see the picture, ...

Hi! Oh my, this was magical. I loved the personification of the earth--a motherly figure. It made me feel comforted even though a storm was occurring at the time. As ...