Lilicia

Hi! I've finally got round to reviewing this! Sorry for the delay :? Firstly, let me say that this is really good. It captured my attention with its orginiality, and ...

Hi! Thanks for the PM! I would have missed this wonderful piece of work otherwise :D This is really good - your writing style has something about it that makes ...

Hi! This is interesting. I'm intruiged. My son chocked on a tear. 'Chocked' should be 'choked'. The other mistakes have already been pointed out,so that's about it! Keep writing, I'd ...

Hi! This was really nice, and even though it was short you portrayed the emotions and descriptions perfectly. The nit-picks were already pointed out, so there's not much else I ...

Hi! This is really good. The prologue really intruiged me, and this chapter's also very interesting. You've got a very good story coming along. It's very original, and even though ...

This is really good! I was captivated by the first few paragraphs. I love your descriptions of his mask, and especially the repetition of 'I used to think he was ...

Hi! I liked this - it's very well written. However, there are always the nitpicks... They were so deep in there love It should be ' their love'. But, noone ...

Hi! This is good, but it needs some work. I'll start off with the nit-picks: I scream frantically at the top of my lungs, trying anything to keep my so-called ...

Hi! Lilicia here, please excuse my extreme pickyness this evening! Firstly, this was very interesting and original, I liked it. A very good idea for a story... Now for the ...

Hi Evi, Lilicia here! I owe you a review (thank you so much for reviewing my murderer thing, it really helped!) - so here it is... Firstly, this is amazing, ...

Hi! Let me start off by saying that this is a piece with a lot of potential, and with a bit of polishing will shine :D Now for the nitpicks: ...

Wow. This is amazing! I'm really freaked out now - I don't think I'll ever touch a doll again! I found no grammar mistakes at all, so I can't do ...

This is an intereting idea, even though it's not so original. I was slightly confused in certain bits, but maybe it will be explained later, seeing as this is just ...

Hello! This story has potential, but first thing's first: grammar. The lack of full stops make the sentences overly long, and difficult to read. Here's an example: Morning is it ...

Hi Demi! This poem's beautiful - it's stuffed full of beautiful imagery and the title is very intriguing. Bonnets, bows day at seaside wind blows sand into eyes and you ...