Lemons

Hi, This is a terrific poem. The imagery is relatively outstanding and you seem to use language quite purposefully and beautifully. I don't think I will bother with a long, ...

Hi, This is one of the best poems I've read in a long while. You've done a good job structuring this poem; the contrast between the house and the tree ...

Hi Your language is very poetic in many instances and of course this is structured like a poem because of the stanzas, etc. But, this seems like it is not ...

Hi I wonder if your poem is well-thought out or if you just wanted to vent or express yourself. Either is fine of course. But know that if you wish ...

Hi, Traditionally, the haiku is supposed to juxtapose to images, usually of fleeting moments in nature, and it is actually not conventional in English haikus to stick the the 5-7-5 ...

Hi, I've only read the first paragraph so I wouldn't consider this a comprehensive review (I do plan on reading all of it). From the first paragraph, there are major ...

Hi, There is a frequent problem among writers of poetry. This is that they are too descriptive /in the literal/. What I mean is that everything is far too literal ...

Hi, You do a good job in framing this very common situation or phenomenon in language that is very clear and relatable. I don't really have anything very serious to ...

Hi, I find the overall narrative to be quite good for the length of the poem. You start being depressed and without talking with the other person, and nicely and ...

Hi, This is a mature poem. I enjoy the imagery "I look into my eyes", that's very neat, and adds an interesting dimension to the idea of staring at yourself, ...

Hi, I am not sure what the purpose of your writing this poem is. You could just be writing for fun (which is perfectly fine), but, if you want to ...

Hi, The poem is very vivid and disturbing at times. If this was your desired result, good job. However, I notice that you are 17. Are you considering writing poetry ...

Hi, I find the amount of emotionality within the poem to be far too on the nose. It's plain and overly emotional. If you don't aspire to be a serious ...

Hi, The contrast between "sharp" and "blunt" is good. It's good that while writing you thought of the importance of drawing attention to the dual functions of knives by citing ...

Hi, First, your reversal of the order of [adjective][noun] creates a splendid, very poetic, and melodious effect. Also, your use of the receding sun imagery to highlight the inflow of ...