Laminated

Ha ha, as someone who works in a rose greenhouse, I could not resist giving this one a look. Criticisms first :) I am not sure how I feel about ...

Hey, Laminated here. I'll keep it a bit short. This seems like an intro to a story? I'll assume that's what it is. I would capitalise words, unless you left ...

Lovely work! Rarely am I a fan of rhyming poems, but you managed to nail it. A solid first couplet, I like the reference to Icarus (though I know him ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! :D This sounds like an immensely promising piece, and I'd love to hear more about it! Now, I can only partially critique the prologue, because I ...

Oh, this is cute. It made me feel so good inside :) You started the characters off very distinctly and with their own voices, which was good! Particularly Mr. Thomas, ...

I be here for da reviewin'! Lovely piece of work here! I don't usually review prose but I figured I'd make an exception. Overall, you did an excellent job, at ...

Here's your review promised of olde! Unfortunately, there's something going on here at a deeper level that I haven't grasped. I don't know what it means, which is saddening. I'd ...

Hallooo, me again! Beautiful, as always. Excellent word choice, vocabulary, imagery and all the rest. You've communicated a clear idea concisely and effectively. I have a few suggestions, rather than ...

Helloooo Going with what BlackNether said, Lucifer's goal was not standing for his beliefs, it was to establish himself as the ultimate power in the universe, already ruled by a ...

I am blown away. A hundred bravos. Ahh, to pick just one verse that's my favourite... I must say this one stands out for me; as for “beautiful” - I ...

Helloooo! Laminated here for some reviewing action. Firstly, I loved how you basically captured essence of snail right here. It's cheery and well paced. Also, the rhyme scheme sounded natural ...

Hello! Laminated here for a reviewing. As has been said already, the lack of punctuation at the end of some lines is a bit distracting. I wouldn't punctuate it the ...

This is beautiful. It tells a story like a true country song. Some of the phrases you use I absolutely loved, like "Big city dreams broke my small town heart." ...

Your essay has good flow. You have a clear, narrowed thesis and good background information. I would include references if you plan on publishing the piece, though. Your description of ...