Rose

Hello! I'm here for Team Green, The Mystery Machine.

Rose... Rose... Rose...
This poem was a lot more painful than it was probably meant to be. Does the name Tyler ring a bell? Goodness this is painful.

If I do my best to forget about Rose Tyler, I can understand what you mean.
Roses are used so much in... everything; poems, stories, greeting cards, paintings and numerous other ways.

One image. A rose. What is so good about them, anyway? Why don't daisies get so much popularity, what about soursobs?

Symbolism though. A rose for me represents a person (here I go again) and that line 'cursed with a universe' basically represents how Rose is in a different universe.

So yeah, if you've no idea what I'm talking about I'm sorry. Nice poem, it's just a sad poem.

Hellooo! I'll just get straight to the point; I love how you've taken the cliche of a rose and made it into a question. Poems that end in a question really make me think, and let the entirety of the work kind of sink into my bones.
Corrections:

-shorter sentences/runons
-form your sentences into stanzas! a poem with good stanza-forming is usual a great poem. Without correct formation of your thought groups, the poem seems to run on and on and on. Even with all of the (correct!) punctuation you used.

Praise:
-thank you so much for using proper punctuation.
-I like that this didn't rhyme. I'm not sure why, I just do. Rhyming in an anti-cliche poem would be childish.
-ahh! big, beautiful words turned into metaphors. Thank you so much for not overdoing the metaphors, but when you used them you used them to your advantage.

That's all, friend. Have a great day!

A beautiful poem once again, jessiethought. I can't believe my imagination of how your career is going to prosper. Maybe it's not my mere imagination, maybe it's actually reality.

I read this without fault, and found it displaying an image just like the others. Beautiful. You've seen my other reviews, praising your delicate and pretty poems. My eyes are still adjusting to the luxury. Your vocabulary was in full bloom like a rose, (I apologize for the simile on the flower) and I also wouldn't wish it any other way. Never stop writing, jessiethought, and you might just manage to enter this into your local newspaper. I can see it now: Amazing Girl Writes Amazing Story. Now let me delve through my imagery in peace...

-wisegirl22

beautiful.a universe of of emotions in a few lines. indeed,there being so many flowers,the special emphasis attached to rose, might be a little burdensome on the poor flower at times.the rose sure is beautiful,but at times i find the sunflower more appealing.the personification of a flower is amazing!and worth learning from.loved the line"frozen in formulaic tradition".i bet i would have used the same line if i happened to write this poem.i feel this poem has a hidden message too.at time we should pull our selves out of these stinky and old rose imageries,and shed the evanescence for something more eternal and everlasting-the love and life that is flourishing all around us.once again-a damn good concept.

Hey, jessiethought!

Okay, so I'll try to be as helpful as possible. But I will probably just end up constantly commending you through out this review ^^
Right. Let's get down to the nitty gritty stuff. I like this poem a lot - it is very powerful, you are making a strong point, telling us as a reader the hardships of the rose. A rose seems to be trapped in that original circle of romance, love, heartbreak - all that type of thing because it has been over used. And you stress that on line seven, when you say 'bearer of clichés', and that's very true. I haven't read a book/ seen a movie where a rose doesn't symbolize that over run idea of love. Immediately we think of a love when a rose comes to mind, but why? Why not gardens? Or danger?
You have an excellent amount of vocabulary, all used to fully and all needed. You don't throw in extra words so the line fits, you have obviously put a lot if thought into each word, each line, the whole poem in fact. Your imagery is lovely, I especially like 'staggering under the baggage', now that line was not cliché. You poem flows nicely, it has a smooth pace and reads well. Especially aloud. The use of the rhetorical question on the end was a thought provoker, which was the whole point.
Well done!

Yours sincerely,
Traunt

Ha ha, as someone who works in a rose greenhouse, I could not resist giving this one a look.
Criticisms first
I am not sure how I feel about the line "Just one word." I do not think it adds anything, though it does seem like a rocky start. I would change "the bearer of many cliches" from passive to active, or remove it altogether.

Interesting poem! I really like your challenge of the worn out symbol. I hope you intended at least a bit of humour with this, because it got a chuckle out of me. Poor roses.

Overall, great job. You tackled an original idea effectively.

PSA: Roses are very thorny. Never forget this.